Moods of Clouds - Poem [In Response to Brenda Arledge's Week 30 Word Prompt 'Clouds']
Shades of Clouds
Rinita's Photography
About the Poems
Thanks to Brenda's Week 30 prompt on 'clouds' and manatita's kind nudge, I sat down to write these Haiku. Well, technically these are not Haiku because I didn't follow the 5-7-5 pattern. Instead, I made up a pattern of 3-7-3, which seemed to better suit the topic.
And now, the lines. As always, Haiku is about imagination, so explanations aren't necessary. Always open to interpretation.
The Poem
Unread mail
Flies from the distant heavens
Riding clouds
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Darkest kiss
Tremors of blue scare the sky
Dancing clouds
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Boubou beaks
A bite of cotton candy
Autumn clouds
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Dewdrop's foes
Longing for tears in the skies
Lonely clouds
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© 2021 Rinita Sen
Comments
Rinita Sen (author) on September 19, 2021:
As usual I'm impressed with my favorite analyst and dear friend, Li Jen. I was waiting for someone to make that technology connection, and you've done it lol. All the others are also perfectly analysed. Hope you're well.
Li-Jen Hew on September 19, 2021:
Hi Rinita. I like how your poems make real sense. You have associated unread mail and clouds together and it reminds us of how technology stores stuff in the cloud haha. When the unread mails are floating on clouds, we feel safe because we can check whenever and wherever we are. Darkest kiss and tremors of blue paints the picture of lightning and stormy weather. The boubou is flying through cotton candy clouds. And the contrast between happy dewdrops and gloomy rain drops.
Rinita Sen (author) on September 18, 2021:
Thanks Vidya. I'm glad you liked the first one. Thanks again for reading.
Rinita Sen (author) on September 18, 2021:
Thank you for your comment Umesh. Glad you visited.
VIDYA D SAGAR from Canada on September 17, 2021:
A great response to Brenda's word prompt Rinita. I liked the fist Haiku most. Keep writing, all the best.
Umesh Chandra Bhatt from Kharghar, Navi Mumbai, India on September 17, 2021:
You have very nicely used these Hiaku to express your feelings about the clouds, well done.
Rinita Sen (author) on September 16, 2021:
I love your interpretation of my first Haiku, Brenda. I'm glad you felt connected. Thanks a lot.
BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on September 16, 2021:
Rinita
I'm happy to hear Manatita is nudging you along.
Your poems are written as Haikus in a 3-7-3 pattern.
Then you tell us Haiku is about imagination, so explanations aren't necessary. Always open to interpretation.
My favorite:
Unread mail
Flies from the distant heavens
Riding clouds
I'd like to think I can communicate with those loved ones I've lost.
I'll post a link in the word prompt article.
Great job on these!
BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on September 16, 2021:
I'll be reading this after bit & posting it in the word prompt article.
I'm commenting here to keep it on the newsfeed.
I'll get back with you later today.
Rinita Sen (author) on September 16, 2021:
Thank you Ravi. Happy to meet a fellow Haiku lover.
Ravi Rajan from Mumbai on September 16, 2021:
Wonderful Rinita.I love haikus and haikus are all about nature and expression. Great write.
Rinita Sen (author) on September 16, 2021:
Thank you for reading Chitrangada. I'm glad you were able to picturize the various moods.
Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on September 15, 2021:
Hello Rinita!
Beautiful response to the word prompt, clouds. I liked how you defined them, as riding clouds, dancing clouds, autumn clouds, and lonely clouds. Yes, they can be of so many colours, and forms, and moods.
Well expressed, and well done! Thank you for sharing!
Rinita Sen (author) on September 15, 2021:
Thank you John. A little bit of tweak doesn't hurt, does it? Haha. Thanks for reading.
Rinita Sen (author) on September 15, 2021:
Thank you Rozlin. I'm glad you liked the Haiku. Thanks for reading.
Rinita Sen (author) on September 15, 2021:
Thank you Pamela. They just came to me and I wrote them down. Thanks again for your support.
Rinita Sen (author) on September 15, 2021:
Thank you Misbah. You know how it's with poetry, if it flows it flows quickly, if it doesn't you can stare at the screen forever and nothing will happen.. haha. Happy to see you.
John Hansen from Australia (Gondwana Land) on September 15, 2021:
Excellent work, Rinita. I like how you changed the syllable count to 3-7-3 to suit the subject more. All the best.
Rozlin from UAE on September 15, 2021:
Hi, Rinita. Beautiful haikus. I liked the first and last haikus. Thanks for sharing. Take care.
Blessings to you!
Pamela Oglesby from Sunny Florida on September 15, 2021:
I really like your poems, Rinita. You wrote a very good, fast response to Brenda's prompt. I like each poem, and I appreciate you sharing them.
Hugs and blessings to you!
Misbah Sheikh from — This Existence Is Only an Illusion on September 15, 2021:
Rinita, these Haiku are beautiful. Nice response to Brenda's prompt and too quick. I liked all of them but the last one is so beautiful. Thank you for sharing.
Blessings to you!!
