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Love Will Not Die - A follow up to Story Without an End

Love Will Not Die

Short fictional add on, if
you will, to follow Jodah's "Story Without an End" in a semi poetic form. I accept the challenge to a fellow hubber friend to add to the story that he started..... Here is mine John ( Jodah!)

This is a picture of a love that lasted till Death, and maybe beyond.

This is a picture of a love that lasted till Death, and maybe beyond.

Something's come up and I have to go out for awhile!

Philip, sat at his kitchen table, thinking about his beautiful bride-to-be, and wondered what could have come up, and hoping it was not something serious.

This was the first time Susan had said this to him, and she did not give him so much as a clue as to what it was about, she simply said, "something came up and I have to go out for awhile."

Oh well! What was he going to do? He had planned to spend the day with his Susan, and Courtney her adorable three and half year old. Philip had grown to love this little one as if she were his own.

Philip, went into the bedroom and glanced in the mirror. Hmm, I could really use a haircut, he thought to himself. The barber shop he always goes to is on the other side of town.

But, he had nothing but time....



I thought you had changed.

Susan thought to herself, "did I do the right thing by not telling Philip that I was going out to meet Rick?" And then she dismissed the thought as she said "I don't know if Philip is jealous, especially the way that Rick had been, when she didn't even look at another man when she was with him.

Anyway Rick deserves to get to know his little daughter.

Susan and Courtney were waiting on the porch, when Rick arrived. Susan had brought the booster seat and was taking time to fasten it in the back seat.


Rick said, what is taking so....

But stopped mid sentence from the look on Susan's face.

This was neither the time or place

To get in Susan's good grace.


Courtney was a baby when Susan had divorced Rick.

In the restaurant, Rick was ignoring Courtney

Susan could see the question forming in his mind

As his words just tumbled out, Are you sure that she is mine?


Susan shot back, Is that the reason for your drinking?

Because, if that is what you've been thinking

There is one thing you need to understand

I had never been with another man


And if you look into her eyes of blue

You will see they are a perfect match to you

I thought you had changed

Susan said as she rose to go


Please, please don't go

He said, there were so many rumors

I really didn't know, I am clean and sober now

And I really don't know how to explain why I went wrong


She sat back down and whispered softly

It has been so long, as the juke box was playing "their" song

Bringing back memories of feelings

That she thought were all gone


When Love Ain't Right

Philip stared into the face that was staring back at him

Outside a storm was brewing,dark clouds were rolling in

Philip parked his car in front of the cafe

Next door to the barber shop

And unconsciously looked in


And saw a little face looking back at him

What was Courtney doing there?

Then he saw the glint of lighting

On her auburn hair and knew that Susan was also in there


Philip's heart began to palpitate

He was not following them

He just came to get a trim

What was this man doing with his future mate?


See something that interests you?

He had not heard Linda walk up behind him

Only heard her words

See something that interests you?

Was this a pickup line?


Philip had a crush on Linda from the time

He saw her in the high school's cafeteria line

Luscious Linda,

the high school boys had called her


But he put her out of his mind when

She began to date the Captain of the football team

Now here she was after all this time

What happened to her Captain, he heard the Captain was real mean


She had the same sparkle in her eyes

That he had seen so many times

Would you like to have a bite to eat with me?

We could go inside


He stuttered, as he told her

I just came to get a trim

She smiled and said sweetly

I don't think they will cut your hair in there


Linda sensed his hesitation

As she asked

Is it my imagination?

Or have you lost that crush you had on me?


Philip thought about his Susan

With her locks of Auburn hair

And how he had fallen so hard for her

As if Linda was never there


Who do you see in there and what is her name?

Susan, Philip said

I see my beloved with another man

I saw him reach across the table to take her by the hand


Linda said, all the more reason

To walk in with me

Philip said, I don't want her to think I followed her

And I should let her be


Susan had told Philip about her ex.

About a year or so ago, was that the man with her right now?

Philip had never met him so he didn't know

And wondered, did she completely let him go?


The desire to find out about this man

Was about to drag Philip down

He felt like he was in a river

And about to drown


Courtney's little face

Pressed against the window pane

As Philip and Linda disappear from view

All the time her mommy never knew


Courtney spun around with such a sad look

On her little face

Her mommy asked, what is wrong sweetheart?

Do you not have enough space?


Susan saw as Philip with Linda come through the door

Courtney had wiggled free

Running to Philip and yelling with glee

Daddy, daddy, I knew it was you


He lifted her up and held her tight

Who is the man with mommy?

Mommy said he is my daddy

But that is not true, I only have one daddy, that's you.


The patrons all stopped eating to watch the drama play out and to find out what this story is about

The two men glared at each other.

Philip asked, how long have you been in town

He arrived today

Susan answered with a frown


At the same time Rick said

I have been here for a month or so

As Susan whispered low

That is something I did not know


Philip handed Courtney to her mom

Will you be joining your friends?

The waiter asked

As Philip and Linda walk away


They took a table across the room

He turned his back to Susan

She could have told me, about him, if she believed in us

Instead she chose to keep it from me and betray my trust


The tension hung like heavy smoke

To permeate the air

Linda asked, where do we go from here?

Philip answered, frankly, I do not really care


Susan sat in disbelief as tears filled her eyes

As she looked into Linda's pretty face

How dare he make me out to be the one who betrayed our trust?

When he is the one who brought her to this place


The whirling wind blew down the door

No one seemed to hear the sound, like a freight train roar

The roof was gone as people tried to take cover

With tables were plastered against a far wall

Which was swaying and ready to fall


Although Philip was in such pain...

His senses he sought to regain

Crawling across the floor toward the booth where she hat sat

And screaming out her name..... SUSAN!


As he neared the booth, he heard a small voice,

Mommy, daddy, mommy, daddy

The twister had gone as quickly as it came

Leaving them in the pouring down rain


Courtney, unhurt was huddled between the 2 seats.

He pulled her close and held her so tight

They both cried MOMMY/SUSAN

At the same time


© 2014 Shyron E Shenko

Comments

C E Clark from North Texas on August 11, 2021:

An excellent story, and I'm going to post it to A/H.

Hope you are staying well. Heard today there are only 4 beds available in TX hospitals, in the entire state of Texas, because of Covid.

Blessings, dear friend . . .

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on May 12, 2016:

Au fait, thank you for the comment, compliment and for sharing, I really do appreciate you.

Blessings and hugs my dear friend.

C E Clark from North Texas on April 30, 2016:

How easy misunderstandings occur -- mainly because people do not communicate at all much less clearly. A great poem-story. Everyone should read it. Sharing.

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on September 06, 2014:

Thank you Jay, for the comments. The picture is of my grandmother Sophronia Morton and her first husband, who died and then she married my grandfather.

J.J. on September 03, 2014:

I searched for the story that has the picture of your gparents this was good.

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on August 31, 2014:

Thank you DealForALiving, I really appreciate your kind comments.

Nick Deal from Earth on August 31, 2014:

Brilliant lines:

Susan shot back, Is that the reason for your drinking?

Because, if that is what you've been thinking

There is one thing you need to understand

I had never been with another man

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on August 31, 2014:

Thank you Billrrrr, for the comment, I really appreciate you.

Bill Russo from Cape Cod on August 29, 2014:

Great work. You took the baton that Jodah handed off and crossed the finish line in first place.

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on June 10, 2014:

Aneegma, thank you so much for the compliment and for reading continuing drama. I really appreciate you.

Jasmine S from Pennsylvania on June 08, 2014:

Wow that was brilliant!! One of the best endings for sure!

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on May 25, 2014:

Faith, we do have some tangled emotions and I have had quite a few. I thank you for everything you do, but most of all I thank you for you, because you are so special.

Blessings always to you.

Shyron

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on May 25, 2014:

Jo Alexis, thank you for the complimen, I tried to relax, but it just does not work and I will pay for working outside yesterday. But that is okay.

Blessings and have a wonderful weekend.

Faith Reaper from southern USA on May 24, 2014:

Shyron, our relationships certainly can be so complicated at times and become an entanglement of emotions, just as you have written here. Enjoyed your addition to Jodah's story which I need to read as I did not see it! Up and more and away Blessings always

Jo Alexis-Hagues from Lincolnshire, U.K on May 24, 2014:

Wow..exceptional!! This is so well done, loved it, you deserve to relax and have a wonderful weekend.

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on May 23, 2014:

Barbara Kay, I don't know how it is going to end, lol. John (Jodah) wrote his chapter and left it open ended for his/our friends to add to it or to finish. As I said to Au fait, "jump in, the water is just heating up" and you could add to the story line. Wouldn't it be fun to write your own ending.

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on May 23, 2014:

Au fait, thank you for the voted, pin and sharing, my beautiful, wonderful friend. I don't know about being my forté, but this is fun. Susan and Linda rose from the rubble by Ruby (always-exploring,) and the saga continues. I know that you are swamped, but maybe you could add a story line or two, or verse, or a chapter. Jump in the water is just heating up.

Blessings to you my dear friend!

Love Shyron

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on May 23, 2014:

John, I read it and loved it and continue another to add to yours as soon as time permits, or maybe if Ruby will write hers first and I will continue where she leaves off.

Thank you John for starting this great saga.

Shyron

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on May 23, 2014:

Maria (marcujor,) thank you for the votes up, I am so glad you like my follow-up to John's story. This is great fun for me. Thank you also for your kind compliments.

You are such a dear friend!

Love Shyron.

Barbara Badder from USA on May 22, 2014:

This is a great story that you should finish. So sad and I want to know how it ends.

C E Clark from North Texas on May 22, 2014:

Still no end! Maybe fiction is your forté and you should be publishing on Amazon/Kindle. Very interesting. Does either Susan or Linda survive? Does Rick survive? You certainly know how to create a powerful plot . . .

Voted up, AI, pinned to AH, and sharing.

John Hansen from Gondwana Land on May 21, 2014:

Hi Shyron, just letting you know I have continued the story...back at the original hub.

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on May 20, 2014:

Flourish, thank you, I appreciate the compliment and I appreciate you.

Blessings and Hugs.

Shyron

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on May 20, 2014:

Harishprasad, thank you for your comments, compliments and your visit. You are very much appreciated.

Maria Jordan from Jeffersonville PA on May 20, 2014:

Wow, this was riveting, heart wrenching and exciting from start to finish!

You are a born poet, dear Shyron with a beautiful and creative mind.

Voted UP and UABI. Love, Maria

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on May 20, 2014:

Kevin, It is good to have more than one perspective as in life. Each of us view love, hurt and our own life experiences differently, and we would not all write our life story the same way. I read your addition to John's story and it is awesome.

Blessings to you my friend

Shyron

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on May 20, 2014:

Bill, Thank you so much for the compliment, for you to say such kind words is so appreciated.

Thank you my friend

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on May 20, 2014:

DDE, Thank you so much for the compliment, and for sharing. you are so appreciated.

Thank you my friend

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on May 20, 2014:

Shyron i forgot to mention who i was following ( you ) I did some editing to include you. Sorry about that. Have a great day!

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on May 19, 2014:

https://alwaysexploring.hubpages.com/hub/A-follow-...

This is my addition following your story..

FlourishAnyway from USA on May 19, 2014:

Great job, Shyron. You capture the emotions so well.

Harish Mamgain from New Delhi , India on May 19, 2014:

Too fantastic and the poetry you weaved is so vivid and interesting ! Shyron, I felt your words like the surging waves, sometimes rising high, sometimes receding low ! A Marvelous story and what a wonderful follow up ! I really enjoyed the story with all my heart. Voted up.

The Examiner-1 on May 19, 2014:

Awesome Shyron. I guess I will make a little change to mine and let the people decide.

Kevin

Devika Primić from Dubrovnik, Croatia on May 19, 2014:

A great hub! You have got me reading on here and so beautifully shared with such a wonderful end.

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on May 19, 2014:

Wow! This was beautifully written....powerful...grabbed the guts and wouldn't let go. Bravo my friend.

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on May 19, 2014:

Ruby, I am so glad you like this tale, you could write another chapter. I hope you will write the next chapter of this never ending saga until Courtney (Susan's little girl) is all grown up and starts her own adventures into love, life.

Shyron E Shenko (author) from Texas on May 19, 2014:

Thank you Jodah, I am glad you approve. I will also link back to your hub.

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on May 19, 2014:

I can't believe this, it is a remarkable tale of love and hurt, with a little bit of rhyme added to make it wonderful! I love your style and i love this story. Who will Susan choose? What more could happen to make her change her mind? And there's Linda, very intriguing. Bravo!

John Hansen from Gondwana Land on May 18, 2014:

This is amazing Syron. You did a great job, I wasn't anything so dramatic, and you left it open for others to continue. Well done. I'm adding the link on my hub.

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