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A new version of "Cinderella" -- What if she had a GOOD stepmother?

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WHY I WROTE THIS STORY

Here's why I decided to write my own version of the Cinderella story, a version that gives Cinderella a kind and good stepmother.

I married a man who already had two children (we've also had two babies together since then). I try my best to be a loving and caring stepmom. But have you ever heard a fairy tale where the word "stepmother" was NOT preceded by the word "wicked"? Neither had I. So I decided that it was about time, and I made one myself!

Of course, doing a rewrite of Cinderella meant changing other elements of the story. If the stepmother and stepsisters weren't mean, then where would the conflict come from? So instead of internal family strife, I went for a strong family working together to face an uncaring, class-biased society.

I had a lot of fun writing this revision, and I hope you have fun reading it.

Overview of stepmothers in fairy tales

Here's an excerpt from the Wikipedia article on blended families:

"The character of the wicked stepmother features heavily in fairy tales; the most famous examples are Cinderella, Snow White, and Hansel and Gretel. Stepdaughters are her most common victim, and then stepdaughter/stepson pairs, but stepsons also are victims as in The Juniper Tree-sometimes, as in East of the Sun and West of the Moon, because he refused to marry his stepsister as she wished, or, indeed, they may make their stepdaughters-in-law their victims, as in The Boys with the Golden Stars. In some fairy tales, such as Giambattista Basile's La Gatta Cennerentola or the Danish Green Knight, the stepmother wins the marriage by ingratiating herself with the stepdaughter, and once she obtains it, becomes cruel."

ONE fairy tale with a good stepmother!

Again quoting Wikipedia:

"The Icelandic fairy tale The Horse Gullfaxi and the Sword Gunnfoder features a good stepmother, who indeed aids the prince like a fairy godmother, but this figure is very rare in fairy tales."

These comments are old, from back when the full story was on this page. I just didn't want to delete them.

Robert Sacchi on November 01, 2015:

An interesting variation of the original story. There was a made for TV movie that was a modern version of Cinderella where the stepmother wasn't evil. In this version the stepsisters were stinkers though.

Charito Maranan-Montecillo from Manila, Philippines on December 08, 2014:

What a beautiful version of "Cinderella"! Like you, I would now and then imagine how the fairy tale would turn out if the stepmom and her daughters were kind and caring. I agree that in real life, many stepmoms are not the slightest bit wicked.

dellgirl on November 13, 2013:

I'm so glad I stopped by here, this is really beautiful! I enjoyed visiting and reading your version of Cinderella. Thanks for sharing this.

AskPat on October 29, 2012:

Truly a great story. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Tolovaj Publishing House from Ljubljana on July 03, 2012:

Did you know there are older versions of Cinderella, where she kills her stepmother? There are more than three thousand versions of this timeless fairy tale known in the world and we are still counting. thanks for bringing up another dimension!

alex89 lm on June 14, 2012:

This was a fun story, I only meant to browse, and I couldn't stop reading!

GypsyLyric LM on April 02, 2012:

What a delightful story. This was just the break I needed this afternoon, thank you!!

Johanna Eisler on February 14, 2012:

The story was delightful! I read it aloud to my husband, then watched him wipe away tears. For some reason, the Cinderella story always touches his heart. The accompanying music was perfect. Thank you.

Joan Hall (author) from Los Angeles on February 07, 2012:

@ecogranny: Thank you much! Cindy is delighted to have some new bling to go with the fancy shoes!

Kathryn Grace from San Francisco on February 07, 2012:

Congrats on your purple star! Well deserved.

yayas on January 08, 2012:

What a delightful story! I've always wondered why someone didn't write a story with a Good stepmother. You did very well. Thank you. You've renewed my faith in authors. Not to mention,.. I jus' KNEW there could be good stepmothers.

Rose Jones on January 08, 2012:

I am so pleased to see that this lens seems to have developed a life of its own - it deserves it!

asvadwords on January 08, 2012:

wow... awesome... nice history you changed to make it a book...

JZinoBodyArt on January 06, 2012:

I love it and all of the subtle changes, especially at the end! :D

cleanyoucar on January 06, 2012:

Nice twist, maybe you can start a new book on this =)

anonymous on January 05, 2012:

A new twist on an old tale... Nicely done.

fullofshoes on January 05, 2012:

I like your style :)

LAfamily on January 05, 2012:

I Like this story mom

bakingoutsidethebox on January 05, 2012:

Charming and well written. Best wishes for a happy future!

anonymous on January 05, 2012:

Nice story

anonymous on January 05, 2012:

i love this story

anonymous on January 05, 2012:

Great story - fun lens.

Missy Zane on January 05, 2012:

I love this. Love the pink, love the story. What great before-bed reading...

Eddie20112011 on January 04, 2012:

excellent!

toldyaso lm on January 04, 2012:

This is one of my favorite lens! I love pink, I love fairy tales, love, love LOVE!!! :)

Treasures By Brenda from Canada on January 04, 2012:

As others have said, great job, interesting story, well presented.

Linda Pogue from Missouri on January 04, 2012:

Blessings! This is a wonderful story!

anonymous on January 03, 2012:

Love the idea of fairy tales with alternative endings. Great job!

miaponzo on January 03, 2012:

Yay!!!! happy ending :) Happy story! Blessed!

missericaleigh on January 03, 2012:

I love fairtales. Theres good lessons to be learned in them. And your version is no exception

Erin Hardison from Memphis, TN on January 03, 2012:

Great story! I liked it a lot, and I liked that you made the stepsisters good in this one too.

Shana rios Chavez on January 02, 2012:

great story

Rhidawn on January 02, 2012:

I was hesistant at first, but I'm glad I read it. It's amazing. I absolutely loved it! Great job and great lens! Keep writing!

Julia Morais on January 02, 2012:

Hope to read more stories from you soon.

anonymous on January 01, 2012:

Very interesting

Frischy from Kentucky, USA on January 01, 2012:

I enjoyed your version very much and look forward to reading more of your fiction.

Edutopia on January 01, 2012:

That is an interesting take on an old tale. What a unique lens.

jadehorseshoe on January 01, 2012:

Ultra-Fine Lens!

marsha32 on August 25, 2011:

I love your version :)

pheonix76 from WNY on July 17, 2011:

Wonderful version of Cinderella! :)

sousababy on July 17, 2011:

My father constantly would change the ending of fairy tales. I think it is fabulous!

Kathryn Grace from San Francisco on July 16, 2011:

If there had been an "I love it!", I'd have picked that in the poll. What a beautiful reshaping of an old fairy tale. Is it available in book form? I'd buy a copy for every one of my grandchildren and one for myself.

As for that glass slipper, even as a child, I questioned its wearability. Always knew it would break. Nice to know that in the original tale, that slipper was pure gold. But then, gold is soft. Could it withstand a night of dancing?

jlshernandez on July 13, 2011:

I love this CInderella story so much and one of my favorite fairy tales.

You are such a gifted writer and should publish children's story books or ebooks. This was such a fun read( I did this at work because it distracted me) and I hope you write more of the same.

RitaDern on June 16, 2011:

Fun, Positive Stuff - thanks for sharing!

lemonsqueezy lm on June 01, 2011:

Wonderful!

lasertek lm on May 13, 2011:

I like the story very much.

Asinka Fields from Los Angeles, CA on January 24, 2011:

Very interesting ...

Lisa Auch from Scotland on November 28, 2010:

Fabulous story!

Jennifer Sullivan from Chicago, IL on November 23, 2010:

What a great job on this adaptation!

MargoPArrowsmith on November 14, 2010:

I love changing stories like this, and you did an amazing job.

Have you ever read Gregory Maguire? He wrote Wicked, the Wizard of Oz through the eyes of the Wicked Witch of the West, who wasn't so bad.

Nice work.

spritequeen lm on November 10, 2010:

Great story! You're very talented! You should get it published in a book! (not just here)

BonnieSue55 on October 29, 2010:

Joan,

Have you considered publishing this as a kid's book? I think it would be great! If you would like to, you could even self-publish online, like at http://www.hulu.com or at http://www.wordclay.com. We need children to learn that being aware of other people around them, and the situations in which people live and work, can lead to having a caring heart and being able to have empathy for others. This story shows this and shares it as a natural order of things (for some personalities, which children can also learn from). I love it, and I really believe that this is a story that needs to be shared!

God bless,

Bonnie

Joan Hall (author) from Los Angeles on September 09, 2010:

@joanhall: One possibility, I think, is that they suppose that the target viewer of the movie (a young girl) envisions herself in the role of the main character. If she has no mother (or a bad mother), then she is the ranking female, facing the world on her own.

Joan Hall (author) from Los Angeles on September 09, 2010:

@hlkljgk: Wow! I didn't realize that. I'm not too familiar with the Disney princess genre. I wonder what they might think is the subconscious appeal of a motherless girl? I'm going to ponder that . . .

hlkljgk from Western Mass on September 09, 2010:

love it! have you ever noticed that ALL disney movies either kill, leave out or include an evil (step) mother?

JoyfulPamela2 from Pennsylvania, USA on June 30, 2010:

Oh Joan ~ this is a beautiful story!! I love it much more than the original story! I can't wait to read more of your stories. :-D

anonymous on June 27, 2010:

this gives me a rather more POSITIVE outlook to talk about in my speech

jolou on May 27, 2010:

Very well done. It's nice to have a tale that is positive and had a great role model of a stepmother.

Virginia Allain from Central Florida on April 21, 2010:

Very well written and you fitted in elements from the original Cinderella, yet made your characters stand on their own. Lovely.

Indigo Janson from UK on April 21, 2010:

I didn't just like this, I LOVED it! Simply enchanting. The original fairy tales were very dark and some of that has been moderated over the years, but this tale is full of light and sparkle and happiness. Why should the step-mother not be kind, and the step-sisters not have good hearts? I loved the twist of the tale with the godmother too. I cannot help but leave a Fairy Godmother... er, no... *~*~ Angel Blessing ~*~* here for your rewrite of Cinderella.

KCottrell on December 09, 2009:

Oh beautiful . . . as a woman who lost her own mother at the age of 24, I cried when you wrote of Sarah offering up the emerald necklace. What a beautiful gesture from the stepmother to her stepdaughter, preserving the memory and honor of the mother. Aaah, kudos for holding us all to a standard of kindness, respect, and peace.

Carmel Aaron on December 02, 2009:

Thank you. I loved it that all the main characters were good and kind.

Even the stepmother.

I also liked the part that Cinderella had a brain, a conscience

and a desire to make a difference.

You tell the story very well.

Thank you,

5 Stars

Susan Deppner from Arkansas USA on December 01, 2009:

Excellent!

Laniann on December 01, 2009:

I love your story.

CleanerLife on October 15, 2009:

What a great way to retell a well known story! If only the people who try to make new movies out of old movies and TV shows had some of your talent! :)

Tiddledeewinks LM on August 16, 2009:

I know because I remarried that my grown daughter and ex have treated me with such hate, that the world could use a better story like this. Not all step-relationships are bad. My ex and daughter need to stop the jealousy.

Robin S from USA on August 16, 2009:

I love this!

GrowWear on August 15, 2009:

Best re-write of Cinderella I've read. :)

Rose Jones on July 21, 2009:

I loved your lens! Thanks for putting all the effort into writing that story! I have become really interested in the power of story in healing, the wicked stepmother myth is one that could do with some positive changes. I'm sure you are putting a lot of good work into your blended family.

Please see my book review of Confessions of an Ugly Stepsister by Gregory Maguire.

https://hubpages.com/literature/confessionsofanugl...

He focused most on the stepsisters, but portrayer the stepmother as a survivor.

And that ezine article on glass slippers was hilarious.

anonymous on July 15, 2009:

Fantastic!

purplefire on July 05, 2009:

That was a really interesting take on Cinderella and idea of stepmothers. Great job.