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red breasted: poem

Justin W. Price, AKA PDXKaraokeGuy, is a freelance writer, blogger, and award-nominated author based out of Juneau, Alaska.

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RED BREASTED: A POEM

by Justin W. Price


Jerky movements,

the head of a robin,
as it bounces on
insecure legs
towards
the dropped bread crumbs.

With yellow beak
it hunts and pecks—

freeloading for survival—

forsaking its wings.




all rights reserved. copyright Justin W Price 2011



Red Breasted: Explained

The older I get, the more I notice nature and, specifically birds. I have also always found it somewhat amusing that a bird gifted with flight would choose to forage on the ground for sustenance. The awkward legs and the vulnerability to predators (like a cat, for example. My mom's cat has left her plenty of gifts on her porch, birds, or at least parts of them) makes me winder they wouldn't fly above the clouds all day long.

After a long period of not writing, I took a poetry class at my local community college. This was one of the first poems I wrote and I wrote it at the same time as one of my other short observational poems, The Mouth. I was sitting, eating a taco and I saw this robin outside pecking at the ground, foraging for discarded food fragments and the words just flowed.

In spite of its brevity, I have always liked this poem. It is featured in my debut poetry collection, published by Sweatshoppe Publications, and available using the Amazon link included in this thread. Thank you for reading and I hope that you enjoyed this piece.

Do you like this poem?

Then check out my poetry book,Digging to China, released by Sweatshoppe Publications. This poem is in it, along with fifty others. Signed copies are available through Sweatshoppe Publications. It's also available on Barnes and Noble and Amazon.com.

Some of my other poems:

Comments

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on May 23, 2012:

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Thanks for the kind words, Rahul!

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on May 23, 2012:

Thanks so much Susan!

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on May 23, 2012:

Thansk fennel. Vulnerable indeed. But, such is nature

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on May 23, 2012:

Thanks Dinkan for the kind words!

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on May 23, 2012:

Thanks Audra. I certainly did. I still remember where I was when I watched the robin and composed this poem.

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on May 23, 2012:

Susan, the older I get, the more I enjoy watching birds.

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on May 23, 2012:

Thanks Cyndi. I appreciate your readership

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on May 23, 2012:

Till, it's certainly not a freeloader, but sarcasm doesn't come out well when I'm not reading it :-)

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on May 23, 2012:

Thanks a lot Michael. I've always enjoyed this one.

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on May 23, 2012:

Ardie, the best time of year is right when summer is ending and that first crisp of fall is hitting the air, but I see your point :-)

Jessee R from Gurgaon, India on May 23, 2012:

nice pic! and beautifully described!

Sueswan on May 21, 2012:

Hi PDX

Love the imagery. Beautiful

Voted up and away

Take Care :)

Annie Fenn from Australia on May 21, 2012:

Lovely poetry, PDX, I love the way you have painted a picture of the robin:

"as it bounces on

insecure legs"

fagile and so vulnerable on the ground, but having to survive.

My votes to you!

dinkan53 from India on May 21, 2012:

Beautiful words. Yes each and every one in this universe is fighting for their survival. Like the Robin too.

iamaudraleigh on May 21, 2012:

I like how you used mindfulness to create this poem! You really observed the Robin in detail! Very wonderful poem! Voted up as high as I could!

Susan Zutautas from Ontario, Canada on May 21, 2012:

This morning I was out in my back yard and saw red breasted robins, cardinals and blue jays. I love to watch all the birds.

Enjoyed your poem!

Cynthia B Turner from Georgia on May 21, 2012:

This was such a nice poem. I read it a couple of times. I don't feel sorry for the robin; it's just being a robin. Enjoyed.

Mary Craig from New York on May 21, 2012:

You've captured the robin in just a few lines. I'm not sure the robin is a freeloader per se, but he does eat what he can. Very nicely done as always! Voted up and awesome.

Mike Pugh from New York City on May 21, 2012:

Outstanding PDX, wow a great deal of potent impact in meaning in your poem here, and not to many words. Not sure how you pulled it off, but you done an outstanding job here. Nice!

Sondra from Neverland on May 20, 2012:

This makes me think of spring, the best time of year!! :)

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on March 24, 2012:

Thanks Rolly... it certainly is

Rolly A Chabot from Alberta Canada on March 24, 2012:

Wonderful and it tis the season again...

Rolly

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on February 19, 2012:

Thanks Kimmie! I appreciate that!

Sunnie Day on February 18, 2012:

Very Nice..I love the robin..so creative :)

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on February 18, 2012:

Thanks, Linda. I've been seeing lots of robins lately. spring must be around the corner

Linda Bilyeu from Orlando, FL on February 18, 2012:

I love birds. They have the life. Come and go as they please. Fly here, there and everywhere.

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on February 06, 2012:

TR, I dunno but it's been up for a long time and I've seen many shorter poems. I'm okay with it. Thanks for liking this!

Trsmd from India on February 06, 2012:

I wonder such a small poem is allowed here...no limit on words..but nice poem you have posted..thanks for SHARING:)

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on November 21, 2011:

Jami, indeed, but, I was watching a robin when I wrote this poem.

Thanks Chris!

chrisam01 from Los Angeles, California, USA on November 21, 2011:

Nice little poem! A bittersweet sentiment.

jami l. pereira on November 21, 2011:

Very sad , but not only the robin pillages , most all birds do , the robin was just chosen as the focal point , i voted this up ,awesome, beautiful and interesting ..as it is :) Have a great evening PDX!

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on November 21, 2011:

How did I never respond to this? Thanks for replying to this. I'm glad you enjoyed it and I appreciate your comment!

No_Clue on April 29, 2011:

It strikes me as sad that a robin forsakes its wings, and walks on insecure legs, freeloading for survival. This created a vivid image, and evoked pity...I love poetry that does that.

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