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Dohn121 is a freelance writer who currently resides in the foothills of the Shawangunk Mountains of New York's famed Hudson Valley.

Enter Your Short Story into a Contest!

From Sponsored by Tom Howard books, the Tom Howard/John H. Reid Short Story Contest is hosting its 18th annual contest. Any type of original short story, essay or other work of prose is eligible. Prizes totaling $5,550 will be awarded, including a top prize of $3,000. Click here to read winning entries from the past.

Entries accepted July 15, 2009-March 31, 2010 (postmark dates). Early submission is encouraged.

The reading fee is $15 per entry. This covers your submission of one short story or prose work of up to 5,000 words. Contestants may submit as many entries as they like. Please note: Generally entry fees are not refundable. However, if you believe you have an exceptional circumstance, please contact us within one year of your entry.

Writers Write!


Welcome everybody!

From the insistence of my good friend Brenda, I decided to hold a workshop in which hubbers can submit some of their works. Back when I was in college, this idea was given to my class as an assignment. Many have struggled with the assignment but the means did have an end and that end was developing a compact, straight-to-the-subject writing style that editors and readers alike will thank you for. I've been told by the best writing professors to NOT WASTE WORDS. The best tasting food has just the right amount of ingredients, so the best stories should also follow the same recipe. Too many words are unnecessary. By the way, I'm not asking for a lot. Most of us write AT LEAST 50 words when posting on Hubpages forums! To enter, you need only do the following:

1. Write a 55-Word Story

That's right. Write a 55-word in story form, no more, no less. I will be checking so no chearting! Please take the time to check for spelling and grammar (do what I say, not as I do!). And just as in any good story, try to create a plot, develop characters and establish a scene. I realize that it's not easy to do, but that's why we're on Hubpages and not Oprah! Write On!

2. Submit Your Story

It's easy. Just e-mail me your story by simply clicking in contact me at the top right hand corner of this page and send your 55-word story as either an attachment or as e-mail. I'll be sure to then post it onto this Hub for others to comment on. Should you have any questions please ask me.

3. Give and You Shall Receive

So long as you follow my instructions, your story will receive comments by myself and others. However, please be advised to use Constructive Criticism. Please don't throw sand at one another's eyes as it's not very nice! In addition, please respect one another and so hopefully, this HUB will be somewhat of a sweet success for us all! Keep on writing everyone! I'm looking forward to all of your stories!

I couldn't think of an appropiate pic, so...

Molly: Our Family's Pekingnese

Molly: Our Family's Pekingnese

Untitled by mirandalloyd

"How was breakfast?"

She smiles in response. "Fantastic." Just like always. David leans forward to kiss her cheek and leaves.

Anna dresses. The hidden scrapbook is in her hands. "Man Killed in Tragic Accident." The page turns. A receipt. "Thank You for choosing Paradise Robotics."

When he returns he doesn't know why she is crying.

The Gift by Dohn121

She was going to be late, but he insisted.

“I wanna give you this,” he said. “I want us to start a family.”

She pushes his hand back as tears begin to swell.

“You know I can’t….You know we can’t. It won’t work.”

And just like that, she was gone, taking only a small memory.

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Untitled by RooBee

“I’m sorry,” he whispered, letting his head drop into his palms. Cold, she gave no response. He peered discreetly through the cracks between his fingers, hoping she’d relent and look at him. Nothing. Not even now, the last time they would meet like this. Still, he stayed with her until after they unplugged the ventilator.

Untitled by Bryan Robertson

Parrying the slashing silver arc Albert reversed, burying his blade.

“You’ll have to do better than that, brother.”

Terry clutched the mortal wound, pajama top staining red.

“Okay, Albert gets the top bunk.  God, I hate this machine!” said Dad as he turned it off, the deed erased.

Terry slunk into the bottom bunk, sulking.

Erin's New Home On the Beach by Brendascully

"You can afford it," he smiled, handing her an envelope,

"No strings?" she asked.

He kissed her tenderly..."It's just a gift,"

"Will you come again soon"

Oision looked at his watch, he was in a hurry as usual.

"We will always be under the same sky"....

And once more she was left all alone

Untitled by eaglekiwi

God is great ,beer is good ,people are crazy! These were lyrics to a song I heard today. A simple melody telling the story of two guys sharing a beer in a bar.Three simple statement we have all heard before, God is great ,beer is good,people are crazy!

Going? by CrisA

Again, he is early. Like yesterday, and the day before that, he has an hour to spare before the train arrives. He looks at the yellowing brochure that says “Edenburgh:The Paradise Destination” and walks away. This time it’s the house, it needs repainting. Probably  white?  Something always comes up.  Always when he’s decided to go.

The Dumb's Tale by fierycj

Everybody called him a dumb kid, even his Mother for god's sakes. He was fed up, so He walked over to his Mother's drawers, he pulled out the old revolver in it. He smiled mischievously to himself; now everybody would know just how much of a genius he really was.


Untitled by saimi_89

"Well, what can I say to them?" Jeda asked Frenrir.

"Say what is on your heart, since that always seemed to work for you when we came out here all those years ago," Frenrir replied.

Jeda nodded and looked at their gravestones, remembering coming out to the graveyard so much after the fatal car accident that took them away from her, yet she had lived.

Sarah by KEckerle

Sarah couldn't bear the sadness on the deputy's face and sought refuge in the rest room, away from all those sympathetic eyes.

In the stark coolness of that tiny stall, the sweet smell of their morning lovemaking rose on the heat of her urine. And Sarah inhaled deeply all that was left of her Brian."

A Moment of Serenity by Useful Knowledge

An old man sits the porch swing and stares at the star light sky. The gentle breeze dances on his ear arousing his senses. The beautiful melody of crickets in the background reminds him of home.  For a moment, he is at peace. Then, reality hits as he walks down the hall to room 209.

Testament by SpyderBytes

He turned and slowly surveyed all within His sight. He knew he was supposed to be certain, yet always there was the lingering doubt.

This time, will things turn out differently? Will His new creation prosper and multiply, remaining pure, avoiding the destruction that had come before?

Screw it, He thought, and smashed it all.

Assassin by SpyderBytes

Amai was certain she could hear the blood sliding down the blade of her sword before falling gently drop by drop to the white snow beneath her feet.

The man looked deep into her eyes, gripping his gaping wound, seeking understanding.

"Why?" he asked.

Leaning close, as his death approached, she whispered, "I don't know."

The Fire by QueenHelene

Fires burned nearby, the scent of ash heavy on the air. A lone figure emerged from the blazing bricks and blackened wood beams. White legs hung limply over the crook of his arm, flimsy nightgown playing lazily around her ankles, twisting in the hot breath of the inferno. Tears escaped their singed eyes, falling slowly.

Shane by flavorofair

“I don’t know, baby. You know it’s not because of your work, we just haven’t got anything and last month was just awful,” I said interrupting him.

“It’s all right.”

The tears were choking me on the inside. I took the checks from him, but then tears started flooding my eyes. That’s why I left.

Posse by Wannabwestern

Blinding light. Sweat dripping onto granite. He crept toward the sliver of darkness. Six shooters gleamed far below.

Still as the summer air, he waited. Barely out of range.

Skidding fast, the rocks betrayed him. A piercing scream.

A red tailed hawk circled near the narrow opening.

At last, The way out. Obadiah squeezed in.

I Laid an Egg by nutuba

“You what?” she asked, incredulously.

“I laid an egg on the counter before frying it for breakfast.”

“Shouldn't you call those guys who write about world records?”

Before I could respond, Aunt Ruth dozed off again.

At that moment, my pet chicken Amber hopped in through the window and settled comfortably on Aunt Ruth's head.

Untitled by Dink96

“Wait!” She begged him as the car slowly pulled away from the curb. “I forgot to…”

She cursed silently, knowing they were already late and that he would refuse to turn back. “We HAVE to be on time,” he replied as he pressed on the accelerator.

“But I left the water on in the bathroom!”

Hot Rails by DarkSinistar

 The hobo sprinted across the yard, careful not to be seen as he boarded the boxcar. Once again, his escape was almost complete. A sound in the shadows caused him to turn. As the creature lumbered toward him, it took him a moment to recognize his latest victim. The second ghoul was the victim before...

Death of Regret by Anita

She woke again with numbing regret for waking; sadness that the dream had not been true. Mark was alive. There he was, drooling on his pillow.

Her mistake, her idiocy, for marrying him were as alive as he.

There are three of us in this bed, she thought-- me, Mark, regret. One will die.

by Susannah Wollman

“Write it,” she insisted.

“I can’t,” he whispered. “It’s too personal.”

The sun streamed in the window and lit up the paper on the desk. His hand shook. She gave an impatient sigh and tapped her foot. “You have no choice. Sign.”

Tears flowed as he put pen to the paper and signed his name.

For Better or Worse by sharongail

The doctor turns his chair around backwards and looks his patient in the eye. "You can look at this as your cup being half full or half empty, just know she is doing the best she can." The patient held his wife's hand and said "till death do us part." "I'll take care of you."

Fifth Grade Note by stuffabuff

 Not sure what to say, she reaches for the pen. She writes down the simplest gesture and pushes the napkin across the table. He smiles and stretches out for the answer. Never has his heart pounded so quickly. On it, the answer was “yes.” In fifth grade, he got himself a girlfriend the note way.

Omega by skaman

 The sun was blinding to her eyes,she tried to block it with her hands.The impulse was there but her hands were gone.Panic stung her brain with questions, whats happened to me? Where are they? A dark figure stood over her.The voice, hoarse ,spoke."If I tell you,will you forgive me?"

Please Come Back by Cayenne_Pepper

 Mike stared out over the horizon thinking he may never see her again. He couldn't figure out what made her change her mind all of a sudden.

The sun began to set in pale shades. Then out of the corner of his eye appeared a feminine figure, walking toward him.

Welcome to Burger Barn by SpyderBytes

 The masked man ran off with the cash from the register. Laura leaned over and picked up the wallet she had seen fall from his pocket when he pulled his gun.

Glimpsing at his ID confirmed her suspicion -- the robber was Ralph, the jerk who had dumped her hours ago! She smiled.

Revenge is sweet.

Untitled by Fredrica Faye Brooks

I look across the table, scream and grab the cell phone. No signal. Tiffany's pleading eyes stare from a bloated face.

"O God, please help me", I beg.

Gently lifting Tiffany's plump body, I stagger to the road and wait. Darkness swirls; and my feet ferry me through endless tunnels.

The Predator by Ann Mason

The dense fog impeded Joe greatly. Bella was trying to flee and stopped briefly to hear his movements. He was closing in fast. She ran through the thicket, looking for safety, barely drawing breath. Joe's long strides gave him momentum. Turning the last corner, Bella dove under the fence rails, to her puppies kennel sanctum.

Untitled by Alice Clearwater

The light turned on, then off.

He raised his eyes as he felt the hair on the back of his neck raise. It was time.

The unintelligible call came from above. He raised his weapon, said a quick prayer, and jumped onto the platform. He was now more ready to face the enemy than ever.

Reality by Hack Retis

Down the road, at a gas station I see God. With a friendly smile he assures me a safe journey. Thought God helped everyone, didn't know he was working personally with me. Looking across the street now; see a new station.
Satan Express.
Not doing too well, I think God used a smut advertising campaign.

Untitled by dansimpson

A phone rings while a couple lies in bed.


"Who was that?" asks the husband after she hangs up.

"No one."  She then turns away with a gleeful smile then drifts away to sleep.

"Wonder who called last night," the husband says as the wife grabs the phone and walks into a different room.

Aunt Ruth and the Time Machine

The sign said, “Welcome to Florence, Have a Nice Day.”

“Nice going, hotshot,” muttered Aunt Ruth. “South Carolina?”

The time machine had screwed up.

“Mama Mia,” exclaimed a man, staring at Aunt Ruth. “I must capture this beautiful smile!”

They left together and returned the next morning.

“Mona Ruth,” he sighed.

“Leonardo, farewell,” she smiled.

BudHasherdashery says

WOW, 55 whole words! So generous of you! With all due respect, a jingle is 55 words, but a story in 55 words is more than a stretch. Suppose the choice of only 55 words has something to do with our shrinking economy, deflation on the value of words? My own opinion in about 55 words.

On a Walk With My Dog by ugina

  One day i went for a walk in the woods with my dog. She is a white Apsoo dog. Her name is Kutu. Along the way, she bit a toad. It  released milky  secretion which was poisonious. Kutu  started vomiting and i was very worried. We rushed back. Fortunately after much vomiting, she is okay.

Where? by Dheeraji

I was waiting at the pier to see the fabulous sunrise from the Far East.

“Where’s the sun?” I asked myself.  It was scheduled to rise an hour ago.

The land remained engulfed by the darkness and confusion rose inside me.  As bizarre as it sounds, the sun had somehow disappeared...

“How can this be?”

She is the Rain by dohn121

It only happens when it rains...Thinking of her.  She looked into my eyes while lying there in my arms mouthing the words I'd so many times before took for granted.  But I couldn't hear her and God knows I tried and God knows I do love her so much everyday...It only happens when it rains

Untitled by Raggits

She had that pert, perky, quick-paced style. Her sun streaked hair pulled back in a banana clip ponytail, trailing behind as she made another perfectly timed turn. She worked on instinct; flawlessly, catching each manifest coded-operation without conscious thought. Her concentration was obviously very deep, but it just wasn't on her way to work.

The Chase by Illuminatii

The pungent darkness settled around her. Would they find her? She hugged her knees and shivered. Strange shuffling sounds echoed in the distance. Shadows were fast closing in upon her…Closer and closer…Pressing.  She closed her eyes and tried not to breath. They were coming! Should she run? Then, they were upon her. “Tag!  You’re it!”

Eye of the Beholder by tambourineman

“I’m not crazy,” Eloise pleads, as the givers drag her back to her room. After the fourth attempt to escape, she slumps into the red velour davenport, forlorn. “I will find you, Harold,” she weeps, raising a withered hand. But the needle drip drips Lorazepam and as the drug takes hold, her lover is lost.

Friendly Neighborhood Bulimic by tambourineman

Rudy’s face knots in concentration, recollecting what he heard leading up to last November. With great certainty he spits, “He’s a dangerous socialist like his buddy Ayers!” Decisively, his ears shut tight to the ramblings of an equally deaf Brian, eager to regurgitate the nonsense of his left-leaning media pundits. Chances are, they’re both wrong.

Lawn Job by Mighty Mom

They stood together, looking out over the vast expanse of emerald lawn.

Where Miles saw a metaphor for the empire he’d built on Wall Street, his trophy wife saw …something quite… different.

“Darling,” she cooed, “I simply cannot abide such inattention. Do be a love, and ask Pablo to come an extra time this week.”

Wrap It Up by Mighty Mom

“They’re too short!”

“Are not!”

“Are too. See? My ankles show!”

“That’s the style, stupid. They’re Metal Pushers.”

“Nuhn uh. The tag says “Kha-Priss Pants.”

“Fine. Don’t get them. Dress like a contestant on ‘What Not to Wear.’ See if I care!”

The sisters looked around for a referee, but couldn’t even find a clerk.

Here's Mud In Your Eye by Mighty Mom

Leaning across the table, he plucked a popcorn shrimp off her plate.

“Mmm,” he smirked, chewing as seductively as he could.

She cringed, looking discreetly at her watch. An interminable hour later, she begged

off -- headache. As her taxi screeched away, splashing his face, he was reminded of why it’s called a blind date.

Stay Lady Stay by Mighty Mom

He was beginning to think himself incapable of monogamy. Over the years there’d been a bevy of colorful beauties, each one lovelier than the next: their names exotic; their siren songs irresistible; his wanderlust profound. But all that changed the minute he laid eyes on Lady Lee. He knew he’d finally met his dream boat.

The Revenged by Dohn121

Motionless, he waited high in the treetop hidden from view.  His patience rivaled a mountain.  With his finger ready against the trigger of his rifle, his thoughts consumed him: Peter deserved better, Eddie.  My son’s innocent, you son of a whore!  He fired…CLAP!  Eddie screamed in horrified agony then felt his neck—It was pink paint.

Clean Up on Aisle 11 by Mighty Mom

Susan, an expert label scrutinizer, stood thoughtfully perusing the jellies. Low sugar preserves -- or Simply Fruit? Reaching for the “just plain jam” (to complete her comparison), she accidentally jostled an adjacent jar. She watched transfixed as it shattered and spread, making a marmalade mess. The clerk was very sweet about it, seemingly naturally so.

Untitled by AEvans

Approaching the garden gates, Alyssa became frightened by the rustling of the leaves directly behind her, who was lurking there? Her heart was racing as she frantically ran for the iron arches only to find that they were locked, trembling with fear she fumbled through her purse trying to find a key to the gate.

Two For Dinner by RevZ63

Dark night in a bright city, badly lit alley. This was not my usual haunt but I was hungry. I am not a dumpster diver just your average bloodsucker. I knew she came this way to get to her car, alone. She never knew, this was her first time, I was gentle. She is sweet!

Her New Life by theduckie

Sara looked at her mother and shouted, "But that’s what you want me to be not me!"
Sara's mother looked at her in shock. 

"Don't be silly Sara.  This is what's best for you…Now get ready to go."  Sara's mother walks out of the room. "That's what you think," she says, while watching her leave.

Hot by mystixsprings

Nadine woke up when sunlight and heat invaded her sleep. She turned on the air conditioner, nothing. She called Freddie, her landlord, to complain. He said he'd bring a fan until George could fix it.

Freddie brought the fan, it worked, until it got hotter. Before it got unbearable, George brought the new air conditioner.

Untitled by Duchess OBlunt

Glancing quickly side to side she runs. Blood pumping, adrenaline rushing, and excited thoughts chasing through her head.

“I can’t miss him again! This is my last chance to find him.”

“Please,” she prays, “Don’t let him get away from me again.”

She runs and vows, this time he is not going to get away.

Smoke by Words Cocktail

Walking into her office was beautiful to me.

Ever since I got to know Tanya, I wished to see her workplace and there I was!

But before I could hold this wonderful feeling of happiness,

I grew faint while being consumed by all that smoke in there...

Oh, I’ve always hated the smell of smoke!

Smoke 2 by Words Cocktail

Yes, I have been here before…With Ashton, thought Jessi.  He’s one smoky memory I’ve never been without…Her mind was engulfed with similar smoke, even today.  Wondering where this will take her now, she closes her eyes only to reopen them amidst the smoke of a smoldering ashtray at a coffee shop!

Heck!  What a daydream!

Faulty Finger Tester by gary777g

I stood on the ladder, about to touch the wires.

"Are you sure the power is off?" I asked

"Yes. I tested it." my grandfather said


"OWWW! I thought you tested it!"

He looked curiously at his fingers.

"I guess these only work for 220 volts now. It's not so good to get old."

Untitled by Chris Eddy

“Don’t touch me!”  The woman said.  Her high piercing screams shattered the quietness of the dim room.  The doctor tried to calm the frantic woman lying on the bed.

“Shh…Shh”, whispered the doctor.  He gently placed his hand on the woman’s upper arm. “Everything is going to be ok. This is a perfectly normal delivery.”

Denim Dress by words cocktail

Kelly waited while her mother slowly opened all her presents.  Please let it be a denim dress, she thought.  One last gift to open…And wouldn’t you know it, there it was!  Just as Kelly was walking over to request that she have the dress, her mum gave the dress away to Maya, the maid’s daughter.

Lost Time by Truth from Truth

My eyes burning, I looked over the cliff. There was no time, should’ve already made the decision. The smoke was confusing me now. It’s not like there’s a choice. I would soon be engulfed by flames. I stared down at the river that I would probably miss when I jumped. I thought of my wife.

Left Behind by dohn121

Their Honda Civic turned the corner and regained momentum. 

“Turn around, Jake!” Billy said.  “I can’t leave my little brother!”

“He almost got us all killed.  He got Duke over here shot.”

“You know that’s not true.”

Suddenly, an explosion rocked the entire neighborhood.  Both Billy and Jake looked back.  The Sunoco Station was burning.

Who Is Minnie Moore? by Nite Writer

It was Chris's fifth birthday! He had hardly slept a wink in anticipation of the birthday party. They were now singing Happy Birthday to him...BUT WAIT! Who was this intruder, spoiling HIS day, honing in on HIS fun???

They finished the birthday song with "...And many more!!!" Chris very confused, asked, "Who's Minnie Moore???

A Memory by Green Lotus

She was 23, she was a looker and she spent the night with Frank Sinatra...

It began with a wild cab ride to the Riviera club in Jersey where she got an earful of insight into the young performer's curiosity and vulnerability.

The rest is there Mom. Write it down, before like breakfast, it's forgotten.

A Love Story by Tammy Lochmann

Longanimous in my desire for you. Salty, sour, and sweet-how can you be so? There you are, let me taste your perfection. You are the paragon of concoctions. I can feel your sorcerous magic coursing through my veins, numbing me. Always there when I need unwinding...My margarita.

Imagine That by MBP42

She sat staring at the screen. It was shocking to see his face again. Facebook suggested they become friends…Like he'd ever know: After all, she was using a fake name and didn't have a picture. His pain-inducing memories would tempt her. She wasn't sure she could resist. He'd never see it coming…Too bad.

Doc by MBP42

Burning creepy crawling all over her skin. The light breeze so painful. Options were limited. Accept doc's advice or refuse it. He was angry she had questioned him. She would love to see him survive one day. Would it change him for the better? The serum was ready was doc? She packed her purse...

The Appointement by a. lohr

I am frightened and so afraid. We are at the doctor's office, for my fate.  Will they last-minute change their mind? I am older now, but so are they.  I give them love. I give my all... I guess they did decide...

Here is the Vet with the needle to put me to sleep.

Untitled by Seageant Pariah

What spirits haunt this parcel of deserted land? Djinns or worse? Do they watch, crowded at the window? Do they crowd over shoulder? Do they reckon among themselves the sum of my comings and goings? Do they care? I swear I heard them, I swear they closed that door. Nay, not the wind, but them.

A Swan Coach by Amevie Ameline

I went to the lake next to my home.

I'm not very athletic but I was determined.

I decided to run for 30 minutes.

But I ran 2 hours fact.

A swan, ran away from me and I maybe ran 20 kilometers.

If you don’t know if you are athletic person, make a swan test!

Neighborhood's Secrets by Eve Rihouey

_Welcome to the neighborhood, I'm Elizabeth!

_I'm Maddy.

_Where do you come from?

_Up north

_Where exactly?

_A small town, why do you want to know that?

_Why don't you want to tell me?

_It's no big deal it's just...

Just like that, Elizabeth knows: Maddy has a secret.

Everybody has a secret.

The Man Who Was Waiting by Nadaud

The man who was waiting

He was waiting for something because he had to write something.

But what?

A story? A joke? Maybe.

But he was waiting. Something would happen in his head, something will happen!

But what?

He doesn't have any idea of what to write!

But have I said you that "he" was me?


Matteo on July 26, 2013:

Gorgeous photos and a grgoeous couple. It's funny how you think you love them, but as you mature and grow together you discover there is much more. Happy Anniversary![] Reply:March 4th, 2012 at 2:23 pmThat's very true Melissa. Thank you![]

Kevin on July 26, 2013:

My anniversary is in two weeks and we will have been marired for 23 years! I also love my husband more now than I did back then Happy Anniversary Katrina and cheers to the many many wonderful years ahead. xxSomething Gorgeous recently posted..[] Reply:March 4th, 2012 at 2:22 pmThat's lovely! Thanks so much.[]

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on October 25, 2011:

Thank you for commenting haikutwinkle. Better late than never right? I'll be sure to check out your hubs as well.

haikutwinkle on May 03, 2011:

This is absolutely fantastic! Look forward to join the contest! Thanks for the info ;)

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on June 05, 2010:

Thank you for commenting. If you'd like, I'd be more than happy to include a 55-word story of yours here. Please let me know.

Jorge Vamos on June 04, 2010:

What a great idea.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on March 09, 2010:

Ha! Thanks, katyzzz. I welcome your submission when your ready.

katyzzz from Sydney, Australia on March 09, 2010:

WOW a very popular hub, 55 words sounds dead set easy to me

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on March 05, 2010:

Wow! You're certainly on a role! I look forward to reading it and submitting it! Thanks.

MBP42 from have received my official license as a Pastor, praise God on March 05, 2010:

I am working on my next submission thanks for the encouragement.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on March 04, 2010:

Not a problem. I'll certainly have a look and will make the correction. I made that transition too, by the way. I give you a lot of credit for trying as most people would rather not try at all. I hope that you'll add more by the way! Thanks for the submission!

MBP42 from have received my official license as a Pastor, praise God on March 04, 2010:

Hi dohn121, thanks for hosting a forum for short stories, I am new to writing fiction as I usually write poetry. I posted two stories on my own hub and would love to know what you think of them. (sarabilly and damaged calm).

ps my story has a typo it should be After all she was using a fake name.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on February 20, 2010:

I'd love to hear it once you've completed it. Let me know!

Moulik Mistry from Burdwan, West Bengal, India on February 20, 2010:

I'll have a try at it - let me have my own time...

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on February 18, 2010:

Thank you Green Lotus and Tammy Lochmann for submitting your stories! I enjoyed reading them both.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on February 17, 2010:

Hey, Green Lotus. No, it does not. Although I think that your's (if it is non-fiction) will be the first! I'd like to hear it so I'm all ears! Just send it to me via email and I'll post it for you.

Hillary from Atlanta, GA on February 17, 2010:

Hi Dohn. I'd like to submit a story. ..I know it has to be 55 words...but does it have to be fiction? Thanks!

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on January 15, 2010:

Not a problem, TFT. Thank you for the compliment! I'm glad that you enjoyed it. There's no hurry for your story--whenever you do get it done, just send it to me and I'll be more than happy to publish it. Thank you again.

Truth From Truth from Michigan on January 14, 2010:

Sorry I'm late, your newest short story was excellent. There was a large amount of action in a little story. Thanks dohn. It might take me a while, Ive been short on time recently, but I will try to get one more on here.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on January 09, 2010:

Thank you, The Rope! This was my breakout hub, as I got to know so many awesome hubbers just by posting this. I was like the popular kid in school overnight one could say.

Remember, you could always submit a story, so long as this is up! Just email it to me and I'll post it!

The Rope from SE US on January 09, 2010:

This was a wonderful idea and I've been enjoying the reads. Thanks for a terrfic idea! and challenging us to stretch our skills.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on December 24, 2009:

Okay, just for doing that, I'm going to write a new one by tomorrow evening! I promise (it'll be a little Christmas present!)

Truth From Truth from Michigan on December 24, 2009:

Just stopped in to see if there were any new ones.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on December 21, 2009:

Thanks for reading this, Dolores! This was actually my first really successful hub. The submissions were overwhelming, but tapered off after about a month or so. Although this hub does get a healthy dose of hits daily, it's not nearly as popular as it was. All 55-word stories are welcome here still. I'd be honored to publish your story here, so email it to me ASAP!

Although I love your idea, the vote capsule could get tricky, because as soon as a new story is submitted after I create the capsule, the previous votes would get compromised unfortunately, because you can't just add another story to vote on, in terms of editing it :(

Thanks, Dolores!

Dolores Monet from East Coast, United States on December 21, 2009:

dohn - what a cool idea! And I enjoyed the stories too. I should write one. I hope I remember. You should put up one of those vote capsules and let people vote for their favorite.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on November 30, 2009:

Same one, Brenda! I'd like to change the URL one day, but it's gonna take a lot of work! I you want, I can post another 55-word story if you have one you'd like to share...

poetlorraine on November 30, 2009:

is this the same one, or are we doing another

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on November 30, 2009:

Yes, MM is certainly a very good writer. I love her work too.

By the way, I would like to thank Truth from Truth for taking on my challenge head-on to write a 55-word story. I commend you!

Truth From Truth from Michigan on November 30, 2009:

I enjoyed Lawn Job by Mighty Mom.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on October 29, 2009:

Thanks, hrrfzl. I'm glad you do.

Hi, Chris. Not a problem! I do like your story, by the way. Just keep on writing and good things will come, I'm promise you. I got quite the collection here so far! Thank you for contributing your story!

Chris Eddy111 from Ontario, Canada on October 29, 2009:

Dohn, thanks for correcting my work. Still need love and encouragement lol. Great idea and I am really enjoying the stories.

hrrfzl on October 18, 2009:

i like it

words cocktail from Australia on September 28, 2009:

THANks Dohn..

Didn't know it was already published here.

Smoke 2!!-:)

Just came to check..

will be back again..and oh yeah..I couldn't get it linked!!

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on September 27, 2009:

Hello, words cocktail. You can definitely link this page onto your profile or a hub of yours and there are several ways to go about it: You can either copy and paste the URL or add a hyperlink to your text. If you need some help, just click on HELP at the top right hand corner of any page or contact me, via-email. Please let me know. All of us were new one time or another :D

words cocktail from Australia on September 27, 2009:

Great! What a mind exercise is this..will surely like to write some more...But how do I get people to read it and I will also like to get some feedback! I mean, can I link people to my story specifically apart from this hubpage?..By the way, some of my friends have read all these stories and have been thanking me to guide them here!!

SO Great going Dohn..though I am really a new bee to ALL of it...this ONLINE experience etc...would like to learn the trade.. :)

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on September 26, 2009:

Haha! Thank you for your hard work. Let me know if you have another story and I'll post it. I'll come up with one myself.

words cocktail from Australia on September 26, 2009:

:) Thanks Dohn..

you have no idea how smoky i feel-lol!!

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on September 14, 2009:

LOL, thank you for that, sannyasin! You are too much.

sannyasinman on September 13, 2009:

My 55 word story, entitled "I write, therefore I am a writer"

"Wot mee du lyke iz rytin cos dats wot mee duz wen mee aynt got nottin els to do. So I iz a ryter den, innit? Me liykes to rite abowt wot mee duz an sumtymes wot mee duz not do, its orl in de mynd anee way, innit? Lyke, ya no wot I meen?“

For an explanation of this 55-word masterpiece, please see the following hub - all will be revealed . .

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on September 01, 2009:

Thanks, awsydney. I do have another hub dedicated to completing a couple of stories but I'm thinking about tearing them down, because it hasn't gotten any submissions. We'll see, I guess.

awsydney from Sydney, Australia on September 01, 2009:

Great stories from some people which I have now met over the last couple of week. I would be keen to join the next time you have something like this. Cheers.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on August 31, 2009:

Please do! I've taken a break from writing them, but I certainly am able to write a few more! They're a lot of fun once you get the hang of it! I look forward to your submission. Just e-mail to me and I'll be sure to post it.

mystixsprings from Long Beach on August 31, 2009:

I think that I would like to try your 55 word challenge. It sounds interesting. I was reading a book about making writing clearer and this would be a good exercise. It will take about a week or so for me to come up with one. A lot of paperwork at work.

sbeakr on August 28, 2009:

Whoa, sport...we need to lose a zero on those prize amounts up there! But thanks for the link!

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on August 23, 2009:

I'm looking forward to it, cosette! I'll have to write a few more myself now :P

cosette on August 23, 2009:

55 words, eh? hmm i will come back to this one. great hub!

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on August 08, 2009:

Well, MM. It's not my fault that you so DARN GOOD at it! Who told you to be such an awesome writer??? Certainly NOT ME!

By the way, "You got me Going, MM...You really got me now!" (My song is Van Halen's, rather than Van Hagar!) You definitely pulled me back in--I wrote and submitted a story for my own hub! Tell me if you like it or not :P

Susan Reid from Where Left is Right, CA on August 08, 2009:

What happens if your story is 56 words? Does it get disqualified? Just kidding. You know that old rock song by -- I'm not sure who. Sammy Hagar I think: I can't drive 55? Well, I can't write 55. Sooo hard to get the word count exact! But this is too much fun. May never write another "real hub" again. It's all your doing, Dohn.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on August 08, 2009:

Hello! It's so good to hear from you! I look forward to it! Thanks for joining the party!

Julianna from SomeWhere Out There on August 08, 2009:

okey dokey so now I am back and will e-mail my 55- word story. :)

tambourineman from Walla Walla, WA on August 07, 2009:

Thanks for the advice. I own a thesaurus but rarely open it. I'd rather read a dictionary.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on August 07, 2009:

Ha! I know. I learned this exercise in a creative writing class in college and found it extremely useful. Thanks for your double submission. You are one of the few that actually thinks that this exercise is EASY, ya' show-off! Great job!

Susan Reid from Where Left is Right, CA on August 07, 2009:

Hi Dohn. I am just stumbling into this fun exercise. Just sent you two entries. What FUN! Great way to discipline our writing (a little more flexible than haiku -- but for a story, not much!). MM

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on August 07, 2009:

All set, tambourineman. One of the things that I've learn in writing is that in most cases, the first word that comes to mind is usually the correct one. If you have a thesaurus nearby, pour gasoline on it and dance a circle around it. They're absolutely useless. Don't use a $1,000 word when a 50 cent word will do! Trust me.

tambourineman from Walla Walla, WA on August 07, 2009:

Umm, dohn, I was wondering if you could do me a favor. Since each word represents roughly 1.8% of the story, each word is very important. I was wondering if you could change the word "says" to the word "pleads". I think it adds worlds to the urgency of the piece. And I'm sorry to be "that guy" but I would greatly appreciate it.

Oh, and in return, I'm writing another.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on August 07, 2009:

Thank you, tambourineman! I appreciate your contribution. I liked your story as it was dramatic and captured a strong scene. If you decide to write more, I'd be happy to add. Great to hear that you enjoyed doing it!

tambourineman from Walla Walla, WA on August 07, 2009:

I just sent you a 55 word story. Please let me know you received it. Its called "The Eye of the Beholder". Let me know what you think. Thanks for the great exercise in self-disciplined writing. It was fun.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on August 02, 2009:

Thanks, Raggits. It definitely doesn't hurt to try. By simply trying, it will help to refine your writing skills and will make you think twice about possibly using unnecessary words. Good luck!

Raggits on August 02, 2009:

Good hub. I don't think I can sit and write out a 55 word story. Tried my hand at a few short stories, early on. I'll see if I can find them and refine them.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 28, 2009:

In my time, I've heard several people say the very same thing Sidney. You won't know unless you try! Let me know how it goes, as trying will only improve your writing prowess.

Sidney Rayne on July 28, 2009:

Very cool topic...might have to give it a shot. As of now I don't think I could even describe what I am wearing in 55 words...with no clothes on. In any event I enjoyed several of the stories and the topic as a whole.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 25, 2009:

Thank you, hubpageswriter. I hope I can leave my REAL job someday to pursue my passion! I just want to earn enough to survive and hopefully provide for a family. I don't think that's asking for too much. Best wishes to you.

hubpageswriter on July 24, 2009:

You write very well..

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 24, 2009:

Thanks, Chelles. A lot of hard work went into building this hub. I hope more stories come in. A few actually have multiple submissions.

Chelles on July 24, 2009:

So very creative and quite good too :) It is like poetry to me.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 23, 2009:

Not a problem, skaman. I was checking out my other hub and it's not doing a fraction as well as this one (Write This Story). I just might tear it down...Any suggestions?

skaman on July 23, 2009:

thanks for putting me up there with all the greats,i enjoyed all the stories my fave wud have to be assasin and fifth grade note.all very interesting.hope i'm worthy to carry on with other contributions,look forward to reading more by everyone.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 22, 2009:

Yeah, I like that one too! Kind of reminds me of the movie, "Higher Learning" or maybe even "Falling Down" with Michael Douglas. I hope more will share their thoughts.

dansimpson from Stoke on trent, England on July 22, 2009:

I enjoyed "The Dumbs Tale" it's kind of shocking like a slap in the face.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 22, 2009:

There are so many...Okay, the funniest one is nutuba's, "I Laid an Egg," but I did enjoy SpyderBytes' "Welcome to Burger Barn" because he combined both assignments. I hope everyone has a favorite and it doesn't necessarily have to be for a logical reason. I'd like to hear everyone's favorite if possible! That means you too dansimpson! Which one's yours?

dansimpson from Stoke on trent, England on July 22, 2009:

Come on then dohn you started this. Which is your favourite?

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 22, 2009:

Thank you. It's sometimes tough to keep up with the responses. I still have some reviews to do, but most of all, I just want hubbers to have fun.

kephrira from Birmingham on July 22, 2009:

great idea - and some pretty good stories too!

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 21, 2009:

Budhasherdashery did something original. He answered my Hub Question with a 55-Word comment! I could not say no. However, in the future, don't do this. Let's ration a plot with a character...Lights, camera, action! Now smile.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 21, 2009:

Not at all. Thought it was just enough for it to work as a whole story. Great job too, by the way.

Hack Retis on July 21, 2009:

Way cool idea. Thanks for editing. ;)

Cam Anju from Stoughton, Wisconsin on July 21, 2009:

This looks so cool, I'd love to try it... maybe soon because I'm swamped lately. ;) I very much enjoyed the stories from the other hubbers!

Congrats on the nearly 100 daohn121 :D

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 20, 2009:

You can do it. What I try to convey to writers is the urgency to limit words as much as possible as too many words are just unnecessary, just like too many ingredients can spoil a great dish when only a few quality ingredients will do. Wish you success and hope to hear from you soon.

Yes, yes, Scully..."Supersize me or die!" as it were...I have one so far and I have to write one myself, so you are certainly not alone in the matter.

\Brenda Scully on July 20, 2009:

hey this went so well, will be posting my story about fries burgers, and gun fires soon..... Brenda

Montana Farm Girl from Northwestern Montana on July 20, 2009:

Wow, what a great challenge... I guess I will need to leave out all my "...."!!!! I am bookmarking this one and will give it a try tomorrow (try I said, wow, that's a tough one!!!)

Arby Bourne from USA on July 20, 2009:

These are all so good, what a fun thing to do! :D I just saw the new assignment - will definitely try to squeeze that in. Thanks, dohn121, for being our professor. :D Thanks, Useful Knowledge, for your compliment. This was hard!!!!! (for me, anyhow)

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 19, 2009:

Hahaha! No stone throwing allowed here! I recommend juicy ripe tomatoes instead. That way, if the person REALLY stinks up the joint at least the tomatoes will cut the smell! Not a bad story, by the way. I like how the omniscient narrator knows Bella's thoughts. This one's a first! A job well done!

Ann Mason on July 19, 2009:

What a great idea for a hub Dohn. I love everyone's work here. I have submitted a story to you, and shall await my stoning. Choose your weapons wisely : ) Today marks my first month as being a 'writer'; so please use smaller stones LOL

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 18, 2009:

Interestngly enough, SpyderBytes is the only Hubber so far to send in a whopping 3 55-word stories! And to top it off, his latest story titled "Welcome to Burger Barn," is actual a fusion of two assignments, as my second hub/assignment gives you bones in which you add the flesh. Great job Spyder. You're leading the pack.

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 18, 2009:

Don't know what happened! But since I got you cornered, I want to personally thank you for posting that hub. You've been more than anything a NEWBIE like me could hope for!

Eaglekiwi from New Zealand on July 18, 2009:

hi ,think you may have tried to email me , but it was blank lol

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 18, 2009:

Awesome! Can't wait to read it!

Julianna from SomeWhere Out There on July 18, 2009:

I will send today. :)

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 16, 2009:

Shhh!  Leave it to the imagination of the reader!  Great job, wannabwestern.  I realize that not everyone can do this assignment.  Hopefully (unless I get taken down by a six-shooter) the best is yet to come!

Carolyn Augustine from Iowa on July 16, 2009:

That was fun! Poor Obadiah. Wonder what he found in the cave!

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 16, 2009:

Ha!  If you ask me, at $7/hour (and I'm working the drive-thru window) the stick-up guy can have whatever he wants!

Carolyn Augustine from Iowa on July 16, 2009:

And about your homework assignment, You want fries with that?

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 16, 2009:

Ha ha ha! Hey, as long as it's 55 words, I'll accept it! Thanks!

Carolyn Augustine from Iowa on July 16, 2009:

Great hub idea! I'm gonna write a western, of course. Now to get writing...a western short story Haiku!

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 16, 2009:

How's about this for a homework assignment: Write a short story about a high school girl who, after getting dumped by her boyfriend goes off to work at a fast-food restaurant.  To make matters worse, while working at the drive-thru window, she gets held up by someone with a gun.  Explain to the reader what happens from this point forward and come up with a plot to bring closure to the story.  Hope you like it.  As before, you can reply to me with the completed story via email (Max. 500 words) Good luck, everyone!  I can't wait to see what you guys cook up!

\Brenda Scully on July 16, 2009:

this is such fun...... do we get a prize or anything?????? any more people going to contribute.... as I am waiting patiently for next assignment.... shall we put a dead line on this or it will go on for ever...... love n kisses Brenda xxxxx

dohn121 (author) from Hudson Valley, New York on July 15, 2009:

Ha ha ha!  Thank you fierycj!  This hub is just a culmination of all your hard work!  I just work here by opening up the store in morning and lock up and night!

I am so proud of all of you, seriously.  I just hope that I can keep up with the amount of submissions I receive...

From just taking a gander at our work, it seems that our whole lot are a bunch of pseudo-masochists! I think that we're also atheists when it comes to happy-endings. We just don't seem to believe in them! Great job all of you.

Eaglekiwi from New Zealand on July 15, 2009:

Oh noooo, now that Ive seen it ,properly printed, somehow it seemed better in my head (hahaha)...and I could have written somethin better...great discipline. Im either too brief or too wordy. Why by the time Ive ended this comment it will be have taken me fifty words to answer!

Useful Knowledge on July 15, 2009:

Roobee, your story is very good!

Useful Knowledge on July 15, 2009:

Dohn, I sent mine to you.

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