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Mystery Stories - A Very Short Mystery Story

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Unknown Caller

We live in very technologically advanced times, so what if, one day, you found someone else's phone in your house and you didn't have any visitors for a while...what would you do...would it be a simple case of figuring it out or what? So here's my story...

Ah-achoo! Always the dust up my nose on the monthly Monday housecleaning. If you cared to look in the lounge window as you passed our city-slick dwelling, parked in a close-knit community of upmarket overpriced semi-detached houses, you would see me bent over in a paroxysm of dust mite explosions.

This particular Monday, my sneezing began as I put hand to our velvet-clad couch and thrashed the dust into life. Tears acted like magnifiers as my eyes caught a square of silver peeping through the large soft black cushions. Surprised, I extracted the shiny object. A cell phone! I turned it over and tried a few buttons to access the contacts. I almost dropped it as a loud fanfare of orchestral music from Vivaldi’s ‘Spring’ signalled a call.

‘Unknown’ showed on the screen. Not daring to answer, I placed the phone on the coffee table, where it vibrated in a dance of unanswered rage. I felt guilty for some unknown reason. Whose phone was it?

I lived alone, now that my youngest daughter had moved nearer her college several months before. I had no visitors I could recall for the last few months. People I knew seemed busy and distracted and declined invitations to visit our house. Was it one of my daughter’s many ‘lost’ phones? I searched through ‘contacts’ again. None seemed familiar. I dialled a number at random.

“Hello,” I said hesitatingly. What could I say to persuade the person I wasn’t some idiot fooling about? A female voice answered and declined to know anything about how her number was included in the phone list. She cut me off abruptly. I tried several more to no avail. Puzzled, I saw that the battery was running low and searched in my box of collected phone items for a suitable battery recharger. This collection was due to the continuous stream of missing phones on my daughter’s part. I was in luck and thanked the standardization of modern technology and the need to keep the items in a closed box.

I sent my daughter and son a text, asking if they knew the phone’s owner. My son’s text came back, immediately curious about the phone, but with no information about its owner. There was no text from my daughter, who was usually the world’s promptest text writer. I sent her another text, to no avail. She was obviously busy. I wondered if I would keep the phone as part of my collected phone items. It was password protected, so I could never turn it off and on again. A bit of a waste and so much for finders keepers!

Monday dusting now forgotten, I decided to make some coffee, this being my day-off from the busy downtown private detective agency I ran with a long-time partner. I was half tempted to disturb his busy day with a request for a code to unlock the password, but I decided to leave it. He might drag me into some work.

Searching once again through the phone contacts for some clue, I gasped when I saw my own number on the screen. What was it doing there? A sudden soft noise behind me drew my attention back into the room. I turned around and faced down the cold muzzle of my own black double action revolver. At the other end of the gun, I looked into a pair of dark eyes staring out from a black hooded face.

“Don’t move lady or you’ll get it here and here,” a man’s low voice growled at me.

“What do you want?” I managed to say without stuttering.

“Gimme that phone,” he growled. Snatching it from my outstretched hand, he dropped it into an open sports bag at his feet. My eyes widened, as I saw the open bag’s contents. “That’s my jewellery,” I muttered at him.

“That’s right lady and now it’s mine. Turn around,” he commanded.

Strong hands gripped my wrists and with a push I fell off balance, face down on the floor, where he bound my hands and feet together. No counter- attack here!

“Stay quiet lady or you’ll get it.” His soft footsteps moved to the lounge door.

“Why is my name on your phone? And how did your phone get in my couch?”

My questions fell on deaf ears. The front door slammed shut. With plenty of time to think things through, one question persisted. Who was the unknown caller?

Comments

Chaitanya on April 12, 2017:

It was so nice !you are a great writer.... this is best story for 9 cbse students

Vatun on November 24, 2016:

Thank u it helped me a lot in my English project

spandan on June 05, 2016:

Its a very great story. I want to inform you that I also write stories. And recently I am the good writer of all in my school. Many students tried to challenge me but honestly I can say no one had won it. But your story is unbeatable. Just awesome

jackie on April 10, 2016:

i dont even read but it looks good

Jojo on March 25, 2016:

I want to know who unknown caller and woman answered the random number and theif and ehy lady's number on the phone

Anne on January 18, 2016:

Nishi you should think before posting your comment

Anne on January 18, 2016:

Very fun and good story

Vikram Varma on October 27, 2015:

Thats one hell of a story man, it helped my sis wid her story recitation at school !

Thank you !!

nishi on December 20, 2014:

bakwaass story think after you post the story

drishti on December 20, 2014:

good mysterious story ....and eagerly waiting for second half of the story!!!

tanu on December 17, 2014:

it can be more short but very awesome

naruto9 on December 06, 2014:

very good story.very interesting story

Tanveer on November 27, 2014:

Too bad

chspublish (author) from Ireland on October 30, 2014:

Thanks for your comments. Keep reading HubPages and submitting your writing to HubPages!

oyeoye on October 26, 2014:

Interesting.. nice story

sneha on October 21, 2014:

hii..

very well done ...i like mysterious stories ..I want a beautiful ending .please help.

chspublish (author) from Ireland on June 06, 2014:

Thanks for your interest, but I won't be giving out my email address at this time.

Pearson Education on June 06, 2014:

Hi

We are planning to use this story in our upcoming book.We would appreciate if you could provide us your email address.

Thanks

Pearson Education on June 06, 2014:

Hi

We are planning to use this story in our upcoming book.We would appreciate if you could provide us your email address.

Thanks

PALLABI on January 07, 2014:

WOW ! nice suspicious story - won't u tnk that there shd b an endng

billy billingtons on October 25, 2013:

nice very interesting

Alice Ann Day on August 19, 2013:

ahhhhh... Brilliant writing. Fantastic mystery. Very frustrated though as the key to a good mystery is an ending

kanika on July 23, 2013:

what a story!

Marlin 55 from USA on July 03, 2013:

Great mystery story telling at its best.

chspublish (author) from Ireland on April 02, 2013:

AdmiralJim, that's a really great comment. you sum up the dilemma very well. Thanks for visiting.

James from North West England on April 01, 2013:

I really enjoy how it leaves so much to the reader's imagination, less definitely is more in this case. Was the phone even the burglar's? Or just mere coincidence? He never confirms ownership. Lovely.

chspublish (author) from Ireland on March 08, 2013:

Delighted KP you see the benefit of such an endiing, though some other commentators are very dissatisfied with an abrupt and barely worked out ending. Thanks for your visit. Appreciate it.

KP on March 07, 2013:

I liked your ending leaving the readers yearning for more.I use this ploy once a while.As you said there are many possibilities and ways to end the story.Your narration was gripping

mahi on February 13, 2013:

nice story

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its intresting but it needs an ending ...

chspublish (author) from Ireland on December 18, 2012:

Grrrrreat comment. Thank you for reading.

priti.. on December 12, 2012:

thanksssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss vry ncee story it helped me a lot.................

chspublish (author) from Ireland on October 24, 2012:

thanks very much

Annemari from Tiny part of the World on October 23, 2012:

Marvellous story. I like it .

Its good and voted up.

chspublish (author) from Ireland on October 19, 2012:

Many thanks to all for your encouraging comments. Write your mystery story and put it on Hubpages.com

mona on October 18, 2012:

niceeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

Sushmita Shan on October 18, 2012:

Ilike this story a lot. But i expect more mystery. But overall the story is outstanding. Thank you for writing this story.

Sushi on October 18, 2012:

I love this story a lot and i love u

mainak on October 17, 2012:

intresting story

sanjana.s.megalamane on July 27, 2012:

nice story it helped me a lotttttttttttttttttttttttttt :P

:)

shabham on May 19, 2012:

ghatiya!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

javier on May 08, 2012:

do u got more book

chspublish (author) from Ireland on May 08, 2012:

Hello javier, thanks for reading it and glad you enjoyed the story.

javier on May 07, 2012:

it is good

chspublish (author) from Ireland on May 06, 2012:

Hi htodd, thanks for reading and for visiting. All the best.

htodd from United States on May 06, 2012:

Nice Story ..Thanks a lot

chspublish (author) from Ireland on April 24, 2012:

Hi William! It's great you have a big interest in writing. It's always a challenge to come up with the story that will work. Hope to see your work on HubPages in the near future. It's a very helpful space for writers of all sorts of topics. Wishing you all the best and keep up the stories. Thanks for visiting my spot.

william on April 23, 2012:

hi again my mom said your story was awesome! someday i want to be a writer like you i really like reading and writing so much that i want to be an author!

p.s. too bad i cant get an account but mabye when im in grade 7 ill tell you how im doing (dont worry i wont forget)and ill right my stories online too ! wish you the best !take care ! :)

William on April 23, 2012:

Hi im William,im ten and i needed some ideas for my mystery story and you helped me a lot.I got lots of main ideas in mind now! thank you really enjoyed it

chspublish (author) from Ireland on April 22, 2012:

Greetings Will and thanks for your great comment. all the best.

WillStarr from Phoenix, Arizona on April 22, 2012:

Excellent! Up and awesome!

Abby on April 20, 2012:

This story stinks!:( Thumbs down chspublish!

chspublish (author) from Ireland on March 31, 2012:

Thank you Maisam.I can definitely recommend HubPages for any aspiring or established writer as an enjoyable place to be, where you will find a supportive and interested community of like-minded people, writing under various topics.

Maisam on March 29, 2012:

An enchanting story ! Enjoyed it all the way. Hopefully looking forward to join you soon on hubpages.

chspublish (author) from Ireland on March 25, 2012:

Thanks for the review...nice one. Best wishes.

heavymetallover06 on March 25, 2012:

nice story...you should probably do a novel on it,making it more complex...but make it a rather creepier ending, cause the plot is nice, but the ending needs an abridged spice

chspublish (author) from Ireland on March 04, 2012:

You're very welcome and best of luck in the exam!

Shams on March 04, 2012:

very nyc story...i hv my english exam n dis will help me 2 do my best in story writing...............thanku vry much!!! :D

chspublish (author) from Ireland on February 18, 2012:

Thanks for your keen interest. I think it may be a little while before I write something like that again, as I have ongoing writing commitments, but I will try and thanks again.

Malavika on February 18, 2012:

I've read the story, its really interesting. My favourite is still the artists door. Could you write another one like that?

chspublish (author) from Ireland on February 16, 2012:

Thanks again for your helpful comment.

Malavika on February 16, 2012:

I'm glad you noticed my comment, I have started reading the series :)I told my friends your story and they told that it was really interesting story.

Thankyou for the help and support.

I hope we can pass on comments like this...

chspublish (author) from Ireland on February 16, 2012:

Well thank you Malavika for your very encouraging comment. You'll find some of the longer stories - written as a book - I've written for your age group(9-13), uploaded on HubPages and divided into chapters called - 'The Mystery of the Shandon Clock'. Another book is uploaded in chapters as 'The Shandon Rumblings'.

Don't forget to join Hubpages and upload your own stories, so we can all read your good work.

Thanks for visiting again and take care.

Malavika on February 16, 2012:

The Artist's door was amazing! I really hope to read more of your stories. Have you written any books?

chspublish (author) from Ireland on February 14, 2012:

Malavika, great to hear from you.

So glad that you're writing your own stories. Maybe HubPages will allow you to upload your own and then have others read yours.

Thanks for visiting and your lovely comment. You might like to check out the very short story called 'Another Very Short Mystery Story -Granddad's Shed' for another kinda 'mystery' story. There's also the story - divided into part 1 and 2 called 'The Last Vampire in Ireland.'

Thanks again.

Malavika on February 14, 2012:

I certainly loved your story. I'm 11 years old and this inspired me to start writing a short story. It helped me with a game too :)

could you write some more for me?

chspublish (author) from Ireland on February 06, 2012:

Dear Aziz, thanks for reading.

As regards 'an ending', that is an opinion. It is deliberately set as an open ending. So you choose your own ending in your imagination.

I know it can be annoying that there is no set ending, but that's deliberate and if you check other comments, you will see that others agree with you, that there should be a defined ending and others are happy that the ending is open. Controversial I know, but that can be good for the reader who has to think out his own ending.

Thanks for your comment and I hope you visit again. Take care.

aziz on February 06, 2012:

i love your story

its intresting but it needs an ending ...

but i still love it ;)

chspublish (author) from Ireland on February 04, 2012:

Hi Jessica, thanks and I'm so glad you enjoyed the mystery and puzzle of it. Thanks for the visit.

Jessica on February 03, 2012:

thanks for the story it was interesting once when i was in seventh grade i wrote a story something that was almost like you story thanks for making my day a mystery day

chspublish (author) from Ireland on January 29, 2012:

Hi Richard, thanks for reading. The ending may not be to your satisfaction, but that's the way it is at the moment. Thanks for coming by.

Richard on January 29, 2012:

You really need to have an ending or else I can't write a story based on yours. Please. I won't copy yours

chspublish (author) from Ireland on January 22, 2012:

Hello mayur, thanks for coming by. Delighted you liked the story. Take care.

mayur on January 22, 2012:

super story...loved it..!!

chspublish (author) from Ireland on January 20, 2012:

Thank you for your nice comment. Cheers.

harsha vardhan mutyala on January 20, 2012:

nice one:-)

chspublish (author) from Ireland on January 18, 2012:

Hi Angie, thanks for visiting and reading the story. We all certainly have different views about how stories should end.

Some people, like me, prefer the loosely worded ending, so you have to guess what happened. Others, perhaps like yourself, prefer the definitive ending. (I'm guessing here that is your preference).

You see, you can come up with a few different answers to the ending yourself.

It's the only story I've written like that and funnily enough, it's the only story that has attracted many readers. Strange, isn't it?

Thanks again for reading the story and I hope you will visit again.

Angie Aguilar on January 17, 2012:

love the story but I want an interesting end..

Ankur Shinde on January 13, 2012:

Wow!!

It was an AWESOME Story!!!

Thnx!

chspublish (author) from Ireland on December 24, 2011:

Hey kari tom, delighted you enjoyed the story. Thanks for visiting and best wishes.

kari tom on December 24, 2011:

it's good n best of all

chspublish (author) from Ireland on December 21, 2011:

Thanks shray. Keep well.

shray on December 21, 2011:

interesting and good story

chspublish (author) from Ireland on December 08, 2011:

Hi Brandon, I take it this is going to be a long story.

Can i suggest that you sign up to HubPages and release the story in chapters there for all to see and invite comments.

I think you have very intriguing story here and I'm sure others would like to read it and make appropriate comments to encourage you in the finishing of it.

So, what do you think? Maybe join and post more on HubPages. You deserve a showcase and encouragement to keep going. I do so hope you do.

Thanks for coming by and showing your story here.

Brandon on December 08, 2011:

(: loved your story heres mine " Last But Not Least

We start this story in a small town in Holland, Netherland, where 11 Marines, and 10 relatives of the people on Indian island…come together as all of them were or still are related to the people who died on Indian island, All of these Marines, though some of the marines were related to one another. But never the less that come together share the same story, They’ve all lost a family member in the famous mystery of “Indian Island” They also have come together to solve a new mystery “Red Wall Of Amsterdam”, Not so such of a murder mystery, As well as a planned assault made by The U.S Marines… Yes everyone knew about the “Red Wall of Amsterdam”… They say that day you could see the Red gooey blood, as it quickly ran down the wall. They say it was as stringy as gum, it also ran down the walls as quickly as water runs the down the stream of a river….The story of the “Red Wall Of Amsterdam” was that the United States, have sent the marines into the Netherlands in a special mission carried out by the president John, F, Kennedy, This mission was to that the Marines were not to leave no survivors of the cult Named “The Peoples Temple”… The people’s temple’s type of suicide…..Or murder has been around for ages, so this is how the marines were sent. John F. Kennedy wanted to stop the “The peoples Temple” Beliefs…So the marines were sent… A war wages out...For 4 years in the Netherlands…Suicide bombing of Netherlands was mad. But they failed. This War was one of the most well known, Most of them know it as the “Second Revolution” But its other most well known name was “The Red Wall Of Amsterdam”. The marines left no causalities, as 110,000 People died…Some from the cult…some from other religious groups that helped out the cult “the people’s temple” This war was wagered one of the most expensive. As ammunition needed to be sent to the Netherlands almost every day. This war was also the end of “The Depression”. This was also believed to have settled the Depression. The war of “The Red Wall of Amsterdam”. Will be remembered

Chapter One: The Meeting

As the sun would set in, from the west I’d feel a gusty breeze blow in from the slightly cracked open door that I needed to replace the handle on. On October 17th, 1929 at 12:45 Am. I Ben Starling, One of the most healthiest and wealthiest men as for now living in a study have many tinned foods, drinks and well other many food sources, living in Holland, Netherlands I have decided to write in this Journal about a research project , or experiment I attend to accomplish, The experiment involves me inviting several members of the “Red Wall of Amsterdam” and some family members of the case “Indian Island”. So I have intended to invite the top 11 members of the Marine Corps and 10 relatives of the members who died on Indian island I have sent them here unto my study. Not as a meeting but somewhat as a family re-union of the troops stationed by De Rode Hoed. The Soldiers stationed near De Rode Hoed, were sent unto this man’s study to help him confront the cult’s about their previous assault on the American’s…. Revenge? Possibly….. As I could remember one of the members in the house began to remember the Red Wall of Amsterdam he sang the Nursery Rhyme

21 People left in combat

“One ran out of ammo, and couldn’t defend himself against the tom-cat”

20 People in the kitchen

“One got to cook, The other on a hook”

18 People outside in the rain

One felt a sudden pain , The others just sat and watched it rain”

17 People in the house

“The lights blew out, One was infected by a mouse”

16. People preparing for combat

“One pulled the pin, the others didn’t win”

8 People preparing for dinner

“One was left outside, Never survived the winter”

7 People thinking waiting

“One thought to hard and then there was no debating”

6 American soldiers received duty

“One of them hustled to quick and stepped on something then went Ke-blewie”

5 People left in the house

The lights blew out, But this time it was no mouse”

4 People inside from the rain

“two of the People felt a sudden pain”

2 people left all alone

“One shut another, and then a sudden moan”

1 person left all alone

“He drunk a bad whiskey, but no moan”

Now I Ben Starling 2nd lieutenant should of caught onto this sooner….this nursery rhyme well…it was rather different as you can see I am very smart for a person of his early 20’s and yes…I should have caught onto this but before it was too late….By the time I figured out who the killer was I was already dead, I should of figured it out sooner…. It wasn’t who I thought it was….

Lets go back to the beginning

March 31st, 1939 we were all invited to this study early in the morning any of us who were late were kicked out….And wouldn’t have a chance to join back in the Marines again…lets put it this way… No job… no money… but late in the afternoon when everything was suddenly quiet…..We hear gunshots firing in the air….As we walked out we didn’t see no gunshots…or of matter of fact…No people…just firecrackers… Now one of my soldiers under me….Boy what a cocky little fellow he was…Always wanting to prove himself…He decides to check it up, well the matter of the fact was “21 people left in combat, one ran out of ammo and couldn’t defend himself against a tom-cat”…And all of a sudden we see a bob cat in the midst of the afternoon fog…the cocky little fellow shot and shot…….But all after that he ran out of ammo…Once he was done there was no was no more shooting….He tried to run back inside for safe cover, but in a quick snap of a finger he was…well carried away by the tom-cat….Basically the story ends like this…..Half of the people die from a heart attack, one fourth of them die from either “idiotic mistakes” or never thought it could be done….such a simple little nursery rhyme really…cant believe I caught onto it any sooner….. And once I did trust me I didn’t forgive myself for letting almost 21 people die…yes I said almost as I was the character who could “Never survive a winter” as I tried to warn the people of what would happen the doors were frozen shut….i had no hope of telling them and when I had time…..everyone was dead yes I felt absolutely horrible..If you shall ever find this…Please revenge m- (The Letter stops here with blood drops on the pages)

April 3rd 1929 10:30am

All of us came to meet at the study in Netherlands Holland, we’ve received a message saying that our top 11 marines were to meet and pair up with 10 unknown people from England. They said our salaries will be doubled in size for this military experiment… But never did I know what the risks were; we all met in the kitchen at 8:35 Pm. As we all had to set up our things in our rooms, I was not one of those people putting my stuff up…I was the one exploring every little part of the house, every part of the outside and inside. I’ve discovered a few things…. The house wasn’t all that…well as you could say well-fitted? As there was leaks in the cealing…" so there is what i got

chspublish (author) from Ireland on December 08, 2011:

You're welcome Bramhdeep and I hope your assignment goes well for you.

And welcome to HubPages. I see you have just joined and thanks for following.

Perhaps you will upload some stories to HubPages when you get a chance, so we get to read yours as well.

Thanks for reading.

Bramhdeep Singh on December 08, 2011:

Loved it really what a great piece of work helped me in my English assignment as well. thnx

chspublish (author) from Ireland on December 01, 2011:

Thanks so much bobo and for taking the time to read the story.

bobo on December 01, 2011:

gr8 story!!!! helped me with mu english assignment!

chspublish (author) from Ireland on November 30, 2011:

You're welcome Gayaz. Good luck with your writing.

Gayaz on November 30, 2011:

Thanks a lot for the guidelines. I will definitely stick onto it. Regards, Gayaz.

chspublish (author) from Ireland on November 22, 2011:

Shashwat, thank you very much. So glad to be of help.

Shashwat on November 22, 2011:

Gr8 Story... Helpd me a lot!!!

chspublish (author) from Ireland on November 20, 2011:

Hi sjkdijd,

Many thanks for reading the story.

sjkdijdeidkoooooooooooooooooswiiokd on November 20, 2011:

crazy story hahahah

chspublish (author) from Ireland on November 18, 2011:

Hey Dave, thanks for the suggested alternative endings. It's good you're interested in writing stories. What a great way to spend the time, is my view. I'll certainly read your story.

Dave Fernandes on November 17, 2011:

Great story, but I wished there was a little more suspense to it. As I was reading it, i was imagining something else happening to the ending, perhaps you kept getting unknown calls, or possible a gang member was searching for the thief to kill him for an unfinished business. But great all together.

I've also just started getting into creative writing for short stories. I've just completed my very first :). if your interested to read, please do check me out at thatstwowords.blogspot.com. I'm looking for feedback on my writing as well.

chspublish (author) from Ireland on November 17, 2011:

Hello Gayaz, thanks for your interesting comment on the story. The ending is open and so gives rise to uncertainty and thus adding to the mystery, I hope.

As for guidance on writing articles in English. Will you be writing articles for HubPages or elsewhere?

Your question deserves a long answer, but to make it short here are some suggestions.

1. Write about what you know. your article will have a better flow if your knowledge is familiar to you. Readers will like you style.

2.Make out a plan first - a few notes on a bit of paper, showing yourself how you will link up your ideas.

3. A good headline and good interesting and attention grabbing first paragraph.

4. A good ending - saying something the readers will remember or asking a question that causes the reader to think and want to answer. You can see what I was trying to achieve at the end - getting the reader to think for themselves, though some readers don't like that. They want the answer. Nonetheless, it causes them to engage in a comment.

5. Good spelling and grammar - so edit and re-read your article many times before you release it into the internet.

6. Original pictures and drawings are always impressive to the reader and eye-catching as well. Take a look at Mark Ewbie's work, for instance, on HubPages and you will see how he has succeeded with (a)original style and (b) original drawings

7. Be yourself in your own style and readers will get to know and like your style.

8. Be patient if no one reads. Put up more articles.

Hope that was helpful. Best of luck and thanks again for visiting.

Gayaz on November 17, 2011:

Moreover I from India and i have great inclination and interest towards English Language, can you please guide me out in the art of writing articles, novels etc...

Gayaz on November 17, 2011:

I am not used to such endings, but then I think this is the best way to make reader think in differently, since life is full of uncertainities and shock. Thanks for realising me the same... Regards, Gayaz.

chspublish (author) from Ireland on November 13, 2011:

Hi Megal Shah, thank you for your very encouraging comment.