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The Unnamed Star - a Short Poem

John has many years of writing experience in poetry, short fiction and text for children's books. Basically he just loves to write.

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Flash Fiction/Poetry Challenge

Recently a fellow writer, GalaxyRat, issued a challenge to write a piece of flash fiction or poetry. The rules were quite straight forward and basically, anything was allowed except profanity or sexual reference, and it had to be under 200 words.

I don't need much prompting to write a poem so I agreed to take up the challenge. This poem is my response and is somewhat inspired by her name "GalaxyRat."

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The Unnamed Star

In a galaxy light years away

exists an unnamed star.

To us on Earth, it has no worth,

we worship our own Sun.


It isn't Andromeda

or Alpha Centauri,

or part of a constellation

that's known to us on Earth.


But within its little galaxy

the unnamed star's the star,

as important as is the Sun

in this Milky Way of ours.


Circling this most distant star,

unnamed planets are in orbit.

Some may even harbour life

due to its light and warmth.


If other lifeforms do exist

across the universe,

perhaps this is the galaxy

where evolution happened first.


I doubt we'll send a rocket

to the far reaches of space.

The far ends of the Milky Way

are still beyond our range.



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Just a tiny speck of light

amidst the vast night sky,

though every star should have a name.

Please tell me what to call it.


Even when it's dead and gone,

a big black hole in space,

its sparkling light will still shine on.

Light years to reach our eyes.


But perhaps, our star, we call the Sun

may be the first to die,

all life on Earth become extinct,

and just a twinkle in the sky.

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© 2017 John Hansen

Comments

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on April 20, 2018:

Thank you, Li-Jen. Yes. You are right that no one really cares too much about the stars other than to look up and admire them at night. Cheers.

Li-Jen Hew on April 20, 2018:

Hi Jodah. Creative poem! I like that you got inspired by the name GalaxyRat. Your poem does have truth in it. People don't care about the stars as much as the sun. "Just a twinkle in the sky", nice! Thanks for sharing. :)

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on January 03, 2018:

So true, Dianna. There are just so many.

Dianna Mendez on January 03, 2018:

Stars are so fascinating. You wonder how we could ever keep up with all the ones created over time.

Suzie from Carson City on August 29, 2017:

Fly Me To The Moon by Frank Sinatra. This song was written by Bart Howard in 1954 as "In Other Words," and it was introduced on the cabaret circuit by Felicia Saunders. Two years after Kaye Ballard recorded the first commercial version of the song, Johnny Mathis released his rendition as "Fly Me to the Moon."

And "Yes," we give away our age....but just keep smiling & singing. No one will notice! :)

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 29, 2017:

That is wonderful, Paula. I am glad the poem inspired a memory of Fly Me to the Moon...Sinatra isn't it? Love that song too (not giving away our age is it?) Aw and I thought you were singing it just for me.. :) thank you so much for the feedback.

Suzie from Carson City on August 28, 2017:

Your poem injected a song into my head, Jodah and I've been humming it for hours! Ever heard...."Fly me to the moon and let me play among the stars....Let me see what Spring is like on Juspiter & Mars?..In other words, hold my hand...in other words, darling kiss me. Fill my heart with joy and let me sing....yaddayadda"

.Well, No, not you Jodah! I know you're a married man!! LOL But I do love that song.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 28, 2017:

Cheers Paula. That comment is outa this world. Much appreciated.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 28, 2017:

Thank you, Shauna. Yes, that is a distinct possibility at some future time.

Suzie from Carson City on August 28, 2017:

KUDOS from me, Jodah! You've stepped up to the challenge in your wonderful "Jodah" style. 5 stars for this....pun intended! Paula

Shauna L Bowling from Central Florida on August 28, 2017:

The ending is a shock, John, but may become reality in the not-too-distant future.

Great response to the challenge, my friend!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 08, 2017:

Thanks MFB, yes there is always a glimmer of hope, and that would certainly be a worthy name for the star.

Matthew Frederick Blowers III from United States on August 08, 2017:

Love the photos and the concept. Call it Hope. Even when Our eyes are closed we still see an aura or some tiny glimmers of light before darkness enfolds us.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 04, 2017:

Thank you very much, Nithya. Much appreciated.

Nithya Venkat from Dubai on August 04, 2017:

Enjoyed reading, beautifully penned.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on July 16, 2017:

Yes, Lawrence. I have heard that theory too. It could be the case. I am glad you enjoyed this little poem. Thanks mate.

Lawrence Hebb from Hamilton, New Zealand on July 16, 2017:

John

A wonderful little poem, full of beauty, yet so true.

I read yesterday that some astronomers think the reason we haven't found Alien life might be that civilizations die out before they can reach into the stars.

Enjoyed the poem.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on July 13, 2017:

Thank you, Missy. I am glad you enjoyed this. You could be right about what the little unnamed star represents too :)

Aura is a great name for a star as well. I thought the Coldplay song would appeal to you.

Missy Smith from Florida on July 13, 2017:

Love the poem, pictures, and the Coldplay song. To me that little unnamed star is a representation of all who aspire to reach their dreams, but so far have gone unnoticed. Auras in life; mystics, creatives, and spiritualists who float around this earth. I like the name AURA! It's just a thought. :)

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on July 10, 2017:

My pleasure, Eddy. Thank you for reading and enjoying.

Eiddwen from Wales on July 10, 2017:

a truly wonderful poem John. Thoroughly enjoyed and thank you so much for sharing.

Eddy.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on July 05, 2017:

Thank you for those kind words Kamalesh. Glad you enjoyed this poem.

Kamalesh Chakraverty from Sahaganj, Dist. Hooghly, West Bengal, India on July 05, 2017:

Simply Wonderful!

Best Wishes, Kamalesh

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on July 05, 2017:

Hello Paula. I am glad that you enjoy my poetry.mone of my aims is to try and write poetry that will appeal to everyone, even those who say they don't like or understand poetry. Thanks for cheering for me.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on July 05, 2017:

Thank you, Shanmarie. I really appreciate that comment. I am glad you found it thought provoking.

Shannon Henry from Texas on July 04, 2017:

Oh, what imagery. I always enjoy reading your work. This one could have ended after the second stanza and I would have liked it and felt it complete simply because I found those stanzas intriguing. But I did scroll on and read the rest and it is thought-provoking.

Suzie from Carson City on July 04, 2017:

Jodah.....Always wonderful, always inspiring, your poetry is some of the very best written. I don't enjoy all poetry but I truly do, yours. Wishing you luck with the challenge....I'm cheering for you.

Peace, Paula

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on July 03, 2017:

Genna, I always look forward to your visits to my hubs. Yes, the Universe is full of unknowns and our earth is but one tiny speck.

Genna East from Massachusetts, USA on July 03, 2017:

Hi John…

Your poem captures the beautiful yet uncertain unknowns of the universe; and how they could diminish or transform in the blink of an eye. Nicely done.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on July 01, 2017:

Thank you again, Devika.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 30, 2017:

I really appreciate you stopping by to read this, Devika. Thank you.

Devika Primić from Dubrovnik, Croatia on June 30, 2017:

Your idea of this poem is great and so special!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 29, 2017:

Tamara, you are welcome to visit this poem as many times as you want. I love your "topsy-turviness" and the fact that you enjoyed this poem enough to read it more than once.

Tamara Moore on June 29, 2017:

I wanted to reiterate that I Really Like This Poem! And, the images are so fitting. Yes, I know it's my second comment, but that's because I wanted to reiterate how much I like this poem. I understand that I am rather Topsy-Turvy in the weird things I do, but... ya.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 29, 2017:

Thank you, Shaloo.

Shaloo Walia from India on June 29, 2017:

Beautifully penned!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 28, 2017:

Thank you, Larry.

Larry Rankin from Oklahoma on June 28, 2017:

Great response!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 28, 2017:

Audrey, thank you so much for purchasing the galaxy wall tapestry. That really boosted my earnings this month. Much appreciated.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 28, 2017:

So glad you liked this, Galaxy. I don't know why you missed it earlier, maybe the notification went astray. That happens sometimes. I couldn't wait until you published your amended challenge, sorry. Hope you get lots of responses. You should now you opened it to flash fiction as well.

GalaxyRat on June 28, 2017:

I loved it John. I wonder why I didn't see it sooner? This is a great response!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 28, 2017:

That is a big compliment coming from you, Rasma. Thanks so much.

Gypsy Rose Lee from Daytona Beach, Florida on June 28, 2017:

A most amazing poem taking me on a poetic journey through the constellations.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 27, 2017:

Thank you, Glenis. That was my intention for this poem.. to highlight our insignificance in the universe.

Glen Rix from UK on June 27, 2017:

A lovely gentle reminder of our relative insignificance seen from a cosmis perspective. Puts things into perspective.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 27, 2017:

Thank you, Pooja. Good to see a new name reading my writing. Your kind comment is much appreciated.

Pooja Rani from India on June 27, 2017:

A simple yet elegant title for an unusual writing. Very creative!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 27, 2017:

Thank you, Randi. Looks like I covered a few bases as far as you were concerned.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 27, 2017:

Thank you for the kind words, Princess Khalsa. I hope your light does shine on.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 27, 2017:

I totally agree, Flourish. Why give stars and planets boring names made up of numbers and letters like an Internet password? What happened to names like Andromeda for instance? Glad you enjoyed the poem.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 27, 2017:

Thank you, Davo. Yes, I guess "ethereal" is a good word to describe it.

Randi Benlulu from Mesa, AZ on June 26, 2017:

One of my favorite topics and so nicely put. Love the addition of Coldplay. Another favorite. Thank you for this brief twinkle

Ram Di Mitr from Malaysia on June 26, 2017:

Love the Poem and the selection of the pics are amazing. I particularly like this line very much "Even when it's dead and gone,

A big black hole in space,

Its sparkling light will still shine on.

Light years to reach our eyes."

What an eye opener... I aspire to be that star that shines on light years to come

FlourishAnyway from USA on June 26, 2017:

I don't get how scientists can name stars something like B2467 (I made that up, but you get the point). I mean, it's a freaking star! I'd name it something exciting or perhaps name it after my child but not after some letter and number combination. Maybe there's a rhyme and reason to it. Anyway I enjoyed the poem.

Davorunner from Australia on June 26, 2017:

Great one John. It's quite ethereal and interesting!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 26, 2017:

I was hoping for that MsDora. Thank you. She hasn't seen it yet, but I hope she is pleased.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 26, 2017:

thank you, manatita. Appreciated.

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on June 26, 2017:

Your poem and pictures take us into that other world. GalaxyRat must be very pleased. Great job, as usual!

manatita44 from london on June 26, 2017:

Noble effort. Appreciated, Jodah.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 26, 2017:

Fullerman, thanks for reading. I am so glad this is more than just a short poem, and that it gets the thinkingg Ear in motion. Cheers.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 26, 2017:

Hi Mike. You are always so generous with your comments. There may be some cosmic karma, and it reminds me there was a recent carriage driver I still have to read.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 26, 2017:

Thank you, Tamara. Much appreciated"

Ryan from Louisiana, USA on June 26, 2017:

What a great poem and I love the subject of astronomy. This poem different gets the thinking gears in motion. We are such a tiny speck in a infinite universe. So much out there to yet explore. I wish we had the technology to deep space travel. Great good on this. I really liked how it makes you think.

mckbirdbks from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas on June 26, 2017:

Hi John - There must be some kid of cosmic karma going on. GalaxyRat's challenge inspired a work of art.

Tamara Moore on June 26, 2017:

Delightful, and wondrous photos to go along!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 26, 2017:

Well, that is food for thought, Linda. The paralel universe theory.. Anything is possible.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 26, 2017:

Yes it is Clive. Thanks.

Linda Lum from Washington State, USA on June 26, 2017:

John, I wonder of somewhere, near that unnamed little star, is someone writing a similar poem, about another 'unnamed star'...the one we call the Sun?

Very creative verse, and I loved the pictures.

Clive Williams from Jamaica on June 26, 2017:

good one....poem about space

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 26, 2017:

Hey, Bill. I love that name "Beacon" thanks for reading and coming upswing the name.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 26, 2017:

Yes, ThreeKeys, Cold Play are great. I appreciate your comment regarding the poem too. Cheers.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 26, 2017:

Eric, who can't admire the stars in one way or another. Observing them, wishing on them, or writing poems and songs about them..all good.

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on June 26, 2017:

I shall call it Beacon from this day forward. :)

threekeys on June 26, 2017:

Love this song! Love Coldplay!

The poem's imagery was delightful.

Eric Dierker from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A. on June 26, 2017:

I would have to surmise that laying flat on the grass and taking in the stars is about the best thing to do. It comes with wishing on them and seeing ones that really aren't there.

But as you have shown here a poem about them might even be better.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 26, 2017:

Hey Mark, thank you for the comment. Yes, all stars are special.

Mark Tulin from Ventura, California on June 26, 2017:

Nice poem on an interesting subject. Don't know much about stars but I know there's a lot of them. It's cool to commemorate this one. Thanks

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 26, 2017:

Hello Venkat. Glad you enjoyed this, thanks for reading.

Venkatachari M from Hyderabad, India on June 26, 2017:

Very interesting and entertaining poem on awesome marvels of the universe. The images are also very great. Enjoyed a lot.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 26, 2017:

Thank you rdsparrow

Rochelle Ann De Zoysa from Moratuwa, Sri Lanka on June 25, 2017:

Interesting poem with amazing pictures :) God bless you!!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 25, 2017:

Thank you, Harish. I am glad you liked the last line of the verse too. Isn't it funny that sometimes what we consider a simple and quickly written poem often resonates more with the readers? I guess writing "off-the-cuff" without a lot of thought and contemplation comes over more natural and pure. Thanks for the suggestion of "Twinkle."

Harish Mamgain from New Delhi , India on June 25, 2017:

A great response to a friendly challenge ! John, you wove a fantastic poem, taking us to the journey of another galaxy and showing that cute unnamed star.

The last line of the poem is breathtaking ! Just a twinkle in the sky ! I think , you should name that star as " Twinkle ". I enjoyed this beautiful poem.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 25, 2017:

Thanks Tim. They were similar thoughts that went through my head when I was writing this. It started off called "The Unknown Star" but I settled on "The Unnamed Star" instead.

Tim Mitchell from Escondido, CA on June 25, 2017:

An eye opening poem John. I have many thoughts and emotions awakened about names, people, and life. Particularily the process parents must go through to name a child, a star. Then I thought about the process a writer goes through to name their work, a star.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 25, 2017:

Wow! Thank you, Audrey. I appreciate your kind words and also that you are ordering the tapestry. I have been here eight years and that will be my third Amazon sale in all that time. Bless you.

Audrey Hunt from Idyllwild Ca. on June 25, 2017:

A great title for a breathtaking poem John. Glad you included the Galaxy Tapestry wall hanging. I'm ordering this. Stunning photos for your creative master piece!

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