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The Mystery of The Darjeeling Trip—Flash Fiction

Chitrangada likes to express herself by writing fiction and poetry. Her writing reflects her mood and is inspired by the beauty of nature.

A note of thanks to Bill Holland

This hub is in response to the challenge, given by Bill Holland, one of the most respected and inspirational writers, at HubPages.

I am sure, all the fellow writers at HubPages, know about this picture prompt challenge.

I have read and enjoyed some of the awesome entries, in response to this challenge. They all are different and truly depict the creative and wonderful imaginations, of the fellow writers.

Challenges, Prompts, Picture prompts, establish this, as to how much creative, can a writer be.

Thanks Bill, for this challenge and I hope you like my response, as well.

Driving along a foggy road

Driving along a foggy road

The Sunrise makes all the difference

The Sunrise makes all the difference

The Holiday Plan To Darjeeling

" Shimla, Ooty, Mussorie, Nainital, Darjeeling and Shillong"

__The names of all these hill stations were written, on small bits of paper and now was the time to pick up, one of the names, where Raj and Priya would go for a holiday.

Raj and Priya were planning a holiday since long, but were not able to find time, due to their busy schedule. They had been married, since the last two years and their love for each other had grown, deeper and deeper.

To celebrate their third Marriage Anniversary, which was due the next week, they wanted to spend some beautiful moments, amidst the beauty of Nature. But they were not able to decide, where to go, and thus this picking up of chits, to decide their destination.

They called the little girl of their neighbour, to do this job and were excited to know the result.

Darjeeling—

~~~She said, and the couple looked at each other. It is a bit far from New Delhi, compared to the other hill stations, but all the same, the verdict was out and they decided to go with it, as promised to each other.

As soon as they landed at Bagdogra from Delhi, they took a cab for their destination. To their surprise, there was a strange sense of familiarity, all along the fog filled highway.

Both Raj and Priya were puzzled, as well as excited.

"Have you been here earlier---- that is before marriage?" asked Priya.

"No, never----!"

"But it is so surprising that the place looks so familiar to me." said Raj.

Priya was quiet, but strangely she was feeling the same way.

How was it possible that the highway seemed, as if they had travelled together earlier. Whereas, the truth was that they had an arranged marriage and did not know each other earlier than that, leave aside travelling together.

The fog started clearing, with the beautiful Sunrise in the hills, and the couple got engaged in taking pictures, of the lovely and serene landscape.

They wanted to capture, each and every beautiful moment in their camera.

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The Mystery of Those Mountains.

Raj and Priya were eager and excited, and wanted to enjoy, each and every moment of their beautiful road trip, along the gorgeous, green valley, on one side and beautiful hills, on the other side.

Slowly, the fog cleared completely, and they were able to see, the majestic mountain ranges all along the drive; so magnificent; so powerful; yet so calm!

But again, the strange sense of belonging, of familiarity, made Raj and Priya uncomfortable.

On their way, towards the guest house, they could see ---

An abandoned railway goods train!

That made them curious. They got down to inspect it, but they were in for a surprise.

An elderly man was passing by, and he started staring at them, with the expression of recognition, on his face. Before they could ask him anything, he started walking fast, and within no time, got vanished somewhere in the nearby farmland, but not before Raj and Priya could notice, the feeling of scare and surprise on his face, as if he had seen some ghosts.

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And The Mystery Unfolds—

As they drove alongside the green farms, something strange caught their attention---

A deserted Barn.

One could hardly miss it, among the lively and fresh green fields.

And here they spotted the elderly man, whom they had noticed earlier, besides the abandoned goods carriage train.

But he was not alone. Along his side, was an old woman and both the elders, were curiously staring at them only.

Raj and Priya had to step out of their car, to satisfy their curiosity, as well as their own.

The two elderly persons looked at each other in astonishment, as the couple came near them.

Their wrinkled and Suntanned faces, were a clear indication, that they had seen a lot in life.

"So you are back, Rosy and Jimmy!!!", murmured the lady in a quiet voice.

"Back!!"---Raj and Priya reacted, almost together.

"Do you know us?”

“How?”

”When?”

“I mean, I have never seen you, or met you, or even been to this place earlier." Raj said almost in one breath, and Priya nodded her head affirmatively, as if asking the same question.

Both the elderly persons, directed the couple, towards a place, in answer to their question, where they were going to have, the surprise of their lives.

A Graveyard.

"Rosy and Jimmy were deeply in love with each other. They lived up there, in the cottage," the lady pointed towards a green hill.

Lot of small and beautiful cottages could be seen there.

"The preparations for their wedding were almost complete, but as fate would have it, they met a fatal car accident, near those mountains, just three days before their wedding." she said in a trembling voice, her eyes full of tears.

"And you want to say, that we are Rosy and Jimmy, lying there in that graveyard?!!" asked Priya, trying to control the nervousness, in her voice.

The woman nodded her head, in affirmation.

"But how do we believe that? I mean, I don't believe in the theory of rebirth!!" said Raj in response.

"You will! Once, you see their photos." declared the woman.

She took out an old black and white photo, from a crumpled envelope, from inside an old and worn out bag.

Raj and Priya held their breath. They stood there for several moments, in stunned silence, just staring at the pictures, which the old woman held in her hand.

Yes, it was exactly them, in the picture!

"Even God Helps To Reunite True Lovers," said the old woman, with tears of joy in her eyes.

Chitrangada Sharan

"Ours is a forever love… there is nothing but love… it is all love."

~~"Robert Shatford",

Love is Eternal, source: You tube

True love never dies, Source: YouTube

This content is accurate and true to the best of the author’s knowledge and is not meant to substitute for formal and individualized advice from a qualified professional.

© 2016 Chitrangada Sharan

Comments

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on May 31, 2020:

Thank you dear @Aditya.

Aditya on May 30, 2020:

Loved the writing !

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on April 03, 2020:

Thank you M G Singh ji, for reading and appreciating the story. I am glad it reminded you of the wonderful memories, spent at Darjeeling. I had the privilege of visiting this beautiful place, only once, and I loved it.

Looking forward to your story about Darjeeling. You are a great storyteller.

Thanks and take care.

MG Singh emge from Singapore on April 03, 2020:

I liked this article very much. I was posted at the foothills at Bagdogra. I sent two years there and visited Darjeeling at least 40 times. Many a time we used to fly by chopper from Bagdogra to Darjeeling at the helipad there (lebong.) I have wonderful memories of the place and I remember all night parties at the planters club. Maybe I will write an article on it next time

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on April 02, 2020:

Thank you for reading and appreciating, Peggy.

I do believe in such stories, though this is a fiction.

Thanks and take care.

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on April 02, 2020:

This is a great story to Bill's photo challenge. Lovers through all eternity is their story!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on November 20, 2017:

Thank You Hari Ji for reading the story. I am glad you enjoyed it.

Have a good day!

Hari Prasad S from Bangalore on November 20, 2017:

Excellent story chitrangada. I throughly enjoyed.

- hari

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on October 02, 2017:

Thanks Peg for appreciating the story!

Yes it's purely imagination, but I am happy that I could blend the images provided by Bill convincingly. And I am glad to read the comments of fellow writers.

Many thanks and a very good day to you!

Peg Cole from North Dallas, Texas on October 01, 2017:

This story is filled with possibilities and imagination. I love the way you blended the images with the narrative. Nicely done.

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on September 29, 2017:

Thanks Shaloo for reading and appreciating the story!

Glad you liked it!

Shaloo Walia from India on September 29, 2017:

Captivating story of rebirth and true love!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on October 31, 2016:

Thank you Anita Hasch for appreciating the story !

Glad you liked it!

Anita Hasch from Port Elizabeth on October 29, 2016:

I so enjoyed your story about Raj and Priya. Really thought provoking.

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on October 16, 2016:

Thank you lex123 for reading and commenting on this hub!

Glad you liked the story! Thanks.

lex123 on October 15, 2016:

Enjoyed reading this story of rebirth. I loved the twist at the end.

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on September 24, 2016:

Thanks Missy Smith for reading and appreciating the story!

I am glad you liked this small effort. I haven't tried writing fiction but after attempting this and reading all the feedbacks of fellow writers, I am getting inspired to write more.

I always appreciate your writing style, it is so unique and wonderful.

Thanks for stopping by!

Missy Smith from Florida on September 24, 2016:

This was an intriguing story. Both beautiful and mysterious. I really enjoyed this one, Chitrangada. I have enjoyed all the stories you and the others have written from the challenge billybuc posted. I wish I were brave enough to join the challenge, but I find myself a little uncertain about my ability to write something interesting such as yours. :) I think I should stick with poetry and prose. I really loved this. Great Job!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on September 19, 2016:

Thanks Deb for appreciation!

Glad you liked it!

Deb Hirt from Stillwater, OK on September 18, 2016:

Such a beautiful, heartwarming tale.

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on September 14, 2016:

Thank you Devika for reading and appreciating the story!

Glad you enjoyed it!

Devika Primić from Dubrovnik, Croatia on September 13, 2016:

A great challenge and you wrote an interesting story.

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on September 12, 2016:

Thank you MsDora, for your kind visit and appreciation!

I am glad you liked my response to the challenge!

Have a blessed day!

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on September 12, 2016:

Thanks for the pleasant read. You are a good story-teller and you spin a good mystery tale.

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on September 07, 2016:

Thank you Christy for your presence here!

It is such a great pleasure to read your comments. I am really happy that you liked my submission to the challenge.

Wow ! Travel and love , both are so close to my heart~~~Never thought I was combing the two in my story.

Thank you so much for your lovely comments and the tweet! Have a beautiful day!

Christy Birmingham from British Columbia, Canada on September 06, 2016:

Oh sweet Chitrangada! How I love your response to Bill's challenge here :) Wonderful flash fiction that tells of love and travel, with a great message at the end. Well done!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on September 05, 2016:

Thank you Ericdierker for reading and commenting! Pleased to know that you liked this.

Thanks and have a blessed day!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on September 05, 2016:

Thank you Venkatachari Ji for your kind words and blessings! Your appreciation means a lot and I am glad you liked the response!

Thank you so much!

Eric Dierker from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A. on September 03, 2016:

Really good Chitra. What a nice trip to take in all respects. Life is awesome.

Venkatachari M from Hyderabad, India on September 03, 2016:

You have made it amazingly, Chitra! Very nice story. Enjoyed this new plot of rebirth. Very unique from others. Blessings.

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on September 02, 2016:

Thanks beta @adit23!

adit23 on September 02, 2016:

Gripping story telling Maa!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on September 02, 2016:

Thanks shanmarie, for stopping by!

Glad to read your positive comments. Have a good day!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on September 02, 2016:

Thank you Shauna, for reading and appreciating the story!

I am glad you liked it.

It is so interesting to know about The Big Bang Theory characters. What a coincidence! Raj and Priya are very common names here.

You are right that Bill would have a tough time reading all the wonderful submissions. All of them are so impressive.

Thanks for your kind visit and comments!

Shannon Henry from Texas on September 01, 2016:

Mysterious and supernatural. Didn't see that coming. I was merely thinking along the lines of daja vu. Good story.

Shauna L Bowling from Central Florida on September 01, 2016:

Chitrangada, I love this story! Spirits, reincarnation and the paranormal in general are intriguing topics for me. I find my own writing following that path quite often.

I don't know if you're aware of this, but here in America, we have a sitcom called The Big Bang Theory. One of the character's name is Raj, who has a sister named, Prias (sp?). Not quite your lady character's name, but close enough.

Anyway, great story! Bill's going to need at least two days just to read all the entries!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on September 01, 2016:

Thanks Maria, for your kind visit and appreciation!

It means a lot to get such positive feedback from fellow writers. Thanks for the encouragement to write more fiction. I loved it while writing this and hope to write more fiction in future.

Many thanks and have a blessed day!

Maria Jordan from Jeffersonville PA on September 01, 2016:

Dear ChitrangadaSharan,

Your story gave me the chills in the best of ways... what a sweet love story with a moral that true love never dies.

If this is your first attempt at fiction, hoping to see much more where this came from.

Have a peaceful day. Hugs, Maria

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on August 31, 2016:

Thank you AliciaC for your kind visit and appreciation!

I am very satisfied to read your comments and thanks for encouraging me to try writing more fiction. This was my first attempt and I am loving the feedback from illustrious writers like you.

Many thanks and a good day to you!

Linda Crampton from British Columbia, Canada on August 31, 2016:

I enjoyed reading this story very much. You've chosen a great way to incorporate Bill's photos into a story. I hope you write more fiction!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on August 31, 2016:

Thanks Manatita for your kind words of encouragement! I am glad you liked my response to the challenge.

I haven't tried fiction and this is my first attempt but I am loving it.

So good to hear from you and thanks for your appreciation! Have a blessed day!

manatita44 from london on August 31, 2016:

A very good attempt, ChitrangadaSharan, and a truly wonderful ending. A nose for fiction writing?

Sublime video, from the land of ragas, sitar, tabla, vina ....

Nice one!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on August 31, 2016:

Thanks Nithya for your kind visit and appreciation!

Pleased to learn that you enjoyed the story.

Nithya Venkat from Dubai on August 31, 2016:

Great response to billybuc's challenge. Enjoyed reading.

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on August 30, 2016:

Thanks Shyron E Shenko, for your kind visit and appreciation of the story!

I am glad you enjoyed reading it. I am pleased to read the positive comments!

Have a blessed day and thanks a lot!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on August 30, 2016:

Thanks Faith Reaper, for appreciating this flash fiction!

I also love to read mystery stories but this is the first one I tried myself. Glad to read the fellow hubbers appreciative comments!

Thanks for your kind words and have a blessed day!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on August 30, 2016:

Thanks Dianna, for reading and appreciating the story!

It took me some time to write this fiction but I am satisfied that great writers such as you are liking my effort.

I feel really pleased to read your kind words!

Shyron E Shenko from Texas on August 30, 2016:

Our friend Bill will not be disappointed in this one, Chitrangada I really enjoyed reading this.

Blessings

Faith Reaper from southern USA on August 30, 2016:

Wonderful response to Bill's challenge, ChitrangadaSharan! I love mysteries and this one with the added romance is fantastic.

Well done!

Blessings

Dianna Mendez on August 30, 2016:

You tied the photos together nicely in your story. I love true love tales. You are quite a talented writer!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on August 30, 2016:

Thanks Jodah, for appreciating my response to the challenge!

Glad you enjoyed the story!

Have a good day!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on August 30, 2016:

Thanks Emese Fromm, for your kind visit and positive comments!

I am really pleased to know that you liked the story.

Thanks for appreciation!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on August 30, 2016:

Thanks Nell for appreciating the story. It means a lot hearing it from you. You are the best when it comes to reincarnation stories. I always admire your writing on this subject.

Thanks again!

John Hansen from Queensland Australia on August 30, 2016:

Another very unique interpretation of Bill's challenge. I enjoyed this very much Chitrangada.

Emese Fromm from The Desert on August 30, 2016:

Hi, Chitrangada,

I really enjoyed this story, it had a totally unexpected twist to it, very well done! Glad I stopped by to read it.

Nell Rose from England on August 30, 2016:

Hi, I love reincarnation stories, and this one was awesome! well done Chitrangada, I loved it!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on August 30, 2016:

Thank you billybuc for the kind visit and comments and thanks for inspiring so many of us .

I have read some very nice responses and many more are yet to come.

Hope you would like it when you read it. Thanks for your continued support!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on August 30, 2016:

Thanks Dana Tete for your appreciation of the story. I am really happy to read your kind words-- Really feels good .

Thanks and have a great day!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on August 30, 2016:

Thank you Audrey for appreciation of the hub and the story. It means a lot to me.

You are right -- I have read some amazing entries in response to the challenge but yet to read many of them.

Thanks for your kind words and share! Have a lovely day!

Chitrangada Sharan (author) from New Delhi, India on August 30, 2016:

Hi Suzanne!

So nice to see you after a long time. I am sure HP missed you as much as I did.

I am glad to read your feedback that you liked the short story in response to the challenge.

Thank you so much for your support and have a pleasant day!

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on August 30, 2016:

Thank you so very much for taking part in the challenge. I will tuck this away until the deadline passes and then read it with great interest. I really appreciate you doing this and I look forward to your creativity. From Suzie and Audrey's comments, I will not be disappointed.

Dana Tate from LOS ANGELES on August 30, 2016:

This one is the most creative that I have read so far in response to the challenge. Excellent work!

Audrey Hunt from Idyllwild Ca. on August 30, 2016:

You have weaved a beautiful story from Bill's challenge. I am amazed with the many submissions and talent stemming from our community of hubbers. Congratulations Chitrangada! Sharing.

Suzanne Ridgeway from Dublin, Ireland on August 30, 2016:

Hi Chitrangada, how nice to read yet another lovely different spin on Bill's challenge, more power to you for submitting an entry. I enjoyed reading this so congrats xx

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