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Poems From the Porch 68

John is a poet and short fiction writer who enjoys collaborating on stories with other writers, and partaking in challenges.

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Awards and Acknowledgements

Welcome to the porch once again. I'd just like to start this off by giving my congratulations to all the winners of this year's 'Hubby Awards' (many of who I am proud to say I voted for.) All were well deserving of winning the categories they were successful in, even though two or three were very surprised.

Thank you also to everyone who voted for me as 'Best Poet." I am grateful and humbled, and just lucky that that category was reintroduced after having been left out for a few years. I am not sure what the prize "a swag" actually is, but the real prize is being acknowledged by our peers.

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These Three Poems

There are three poems this week and I think you will find that each one is quite unique. 'A Bouquet of Burgundy Roses' was requested by Rosina Khan but I decided to write it in the style of a 'viator' poem that Ravi Rajan recently made me aware of. In his excellent article 'How to Write a Good Poem in 1 Hour,' Ravi states:

"... the other day I was experimenting with various poetic forms and I came across this interesting form called the “Viator”. It was created by Robin Skelton, the author of the bestseller The shapes of our singing. Viator is the Latin name for traveller.

It consists of a poem made up of stanzas in which the first line of the first stanza travels through the poem moving to the second line in the second stanza and so on until the poem ends with the line with which it began."

'The Path More Travelled' deviates a little from the usual 'Poems From the Porch' fare, as it was my idea and not suggested by a reader. It was just a random poem idea that was bouncing around in my head.

The third poem, 'Gertie's Royal Curtsy' is a bit silly, and was the one I had the most fun writing. Thank you FlourishAnyway for the suggestion. I hope it gives a laugh.

I have come with a nice request. I would like you to write a poem about a bouquet of colorful roses with special emphasis on burgundy roses. I hope you enjoy writing about it.

— Rosina S Khan

A Bouquet of Roses: Image by anncapictures from Pixabay

A Bouquet of Roses: Image by anncapictures from Pixabay

A Bouquet of Burgundy Roses ~ a Viator Poem

A bouquet of burgundy roses

And a card signed by him with a kiss,

To celebrate their time together

And a lifetime of marital bliss.

There is one gift that is always special -

A bouquet of burgundy roses.

Each year on their anniversary

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His deep love for her it discloses.

The very first gift that he gave her

At the restaurant down by the bay -

A bouquet of burgundy roses.

They both pledged their love on that day.

Thirty years on, their love is still strong,

And the champagne tickles their noses,

And on the table, for all to see -

A bouquet of burgundy roses.

I shall be telling this with a sigh

Somewhere ages and ages hence:

Two roads diverged in a wood, and I—

I took the one less traveled by,

And that has made all the difference.

— Robert Frost ~ The Road Not Taken

Image by Valiphotos from Pixabay

Image by Valiphotos from Pixabay

The Path More Travelled

I trekked along the forest trail,

Alone but not afraid.

Pine trees blocking out the sun

Provided welcome shade.

Hark! The tawny frog-mouth owl

Gazing down upon the scene,

From a hole in a dead tree

Just like the forest queen.

Eventually, I reached a fork,

Unmarked - which way to choose?

Flip a coin on left or right?

I’d only time to lose.

If there is a choice of two

My mind says, “Take the left!”

And so I took the track more worn.

My decision far from deft.

The path more travelled, the safer route,

Or so you would expect.

But that may not have been the case,

If I am circumspect.

Image by Jordan Stimpson from Pixabay

Image by Jordan Stimpson from Pixabay

Without more haste, I strode ahead,

No adverse thoughts swirled in my head.

The canopy thinned, then disappeared,

This trail seemed longer than I feared.

The sun had dropped out of the sky,

Still far from home, my thoughts awry.

Then something raced across my path,

Its suddenness left me aghast!

My bravery had long since left.

The darkened sky had been the theft.

Anxiously I increased my speed,

From this turmoil to be freed.

False confidence in expertise

Eroded there before my eyes.

“I’m lost!” I called, “Please hear my cries!”

As thorns and thickets scratched my thighs.

It seemed that now the trail had gone,

And my decision had been wrong.

The path well-travelled was a ruse,

And I had been a silly goose.

In future, I’ll take heed of Frost.

Not doing that, I saw the cost.

A coward whose courage has unravelled,

Next time I’ll take the road less travelled.

We can't let your series end, so here's an idea: a silly poem about a curtsy gone wrong.

— FlourishAnyway

The Queen's Visit: Image by Monica Volpin from Pixabay

The Queen's Visit: Image by Monica Volpin from Pixabay

Gertie’s Royal Curtsy

Word was spreading all around,

The Queen was coming to the town.

All town folk she was keen to meet,

And Gertie thought this would be sweet.

She’d loved the Royals and all they did,

Ever since she was just a kid.

She bought a new dress, hat, and scarf.

Her husband thought it all a laugh.

As time approached she grew obsessed -

Her hair, her makeup, and her dress,

For she was picked to represent

As Town Committee President.

The day arrived, the Queen did too,

So regal was she, through and through.

Her entourage and all were there,

Crowds lined the streets to wave and cheer.

The Queen alighted from the car.

Gertie felt like she was a star

As she stepped up to greet the Queen.

Cameras flashed and caught the scene.

Image by Here and now, unfortunately, ends my journey on Pixabay from Pixabay

Image by Here and now, unfortunately, ends my journey on Pixabay from Pixabay

As the Queen said, “How do you do?”

Gertie replied, “I’m fine, and you?

Your Majesty, welcome to town.”

But as she curtsied, she fell down.

For Gertie’s curtsy had gone bad,

The heel broke off her shoe -so sad!

And Gertie tumbled AOT.

It was a funny sight to see.

Her dress flew up over her head,

Gertie then wished that she were dead.

She’d flashed the Queen, and the whole town.

How would she ever live this down?

The Queen tried to suppress a grin

But laughter rumbled deep within.

Poor Gertie is embarrassed still,

Her failed royal curtsy was no thrill.

Her curtsies have been shelved for sure.

Gertie will bow forevermore,

And if the Royals should come again

She’ll leave the greeting to a man.

© 2021 John Hansen


John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 21, 2021:

Thank you for visiting the porch, Liz. Yes, this is the first time I have tried to write a ‘Viator’ poem. It is an interesting style. I am pleased the atmosphere of the second was appealing, and that the last made you laugh. From what you say, maybe the Queen and Prince Phillip may have found it funny too.

Liz Westwood from UK on September 21, 2021:

Another great poetry collection. I loved the clever style of the first one. I had not noticed this technique before. You created an incredible atmosphere in the second poem. I laughed at the last one. There's a programme on TV tonight celebrating the life of the Duke of Edinburgh. All his children and adult grandchildren have contributed. Apparently he and the queen always enjoyed those situations where things don't go to plan and the queen finds it amusing.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 20, 2021:

Rasma, any porch in a storm..or is that port lol? A little porch surrounded by palm trees actually sounds nice, but I am sure the ones in the Catskills were better still. I will see if I can write a poem about them. All the best.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 20, 2021:

Hi Mary, how are you? I am glad you found Viator poems interesting and enjoyable. Take care.

Gypsy Rose Lee from Daytona Beach, Florida on September 20, 2021:

Enjoyed all of these poems, Always look forward to your porch poems and wish I had a porch to sit on and to be inspired, I guess my little front porch surrounded by palm trees will have to do. I am more a ran of the porches of my childhood in the Catskill Mountains of NY state where nature offers pine, fir, and oak trees for company. Hey, you could place do me up a poem about the Catskill Mountains, Thank you,

Mary Norton from Ontario, Canada on September 20, 2021:

Once again, I enjoyed reading your poems aloud. Thanks for introducing me to the Viator poems. They're enjoyable.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 20, 2021:

Thank you Vidya, I enjoyed writing each of these poems because they were all so different. Blessings.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 20, 2021:

Hi Flourish, I hoped I did your request justice with ‘Gertie’s Royal Curtsy.’ Yes, it may be safer to bow lol.

VIDYA D SAGAR on September 20, 2021:

Congratulations on a well deserved Hubby award John. I loved all the three poems. Especially the Viator one. You did a great one on that. The other two were also fun to read. Have a great day, thanks for sharing.

FlourishAnyway from USA on September 20, 2021:

Absolutely stellar. A royal curtsy to you our Great Hub Poet. Or perhaps a bow.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 20, 2021:

Thank you, bro. I read back through and your suggestions were spot on. I have corrected it as you recommended and it has improved the flow. The first was a typo. Much appreciated.

manatita44 from london on September 20, 2021:

Beautiful work on all three poems, John. I liked Rosina's a lot! If they signed that card together, I would say 'together,', and if it was signed by by him, I would say 'by him,' The two 'with's' so close, don't work that well. I would put a comma after 'thirty years on.'

Poem two is like a combination of free-style Sonnets, with beautiful arbitrary and regular rhyme schemes. The second and especially third poems, were lovely and light-hearted.

The tempo of the third was such, that I would say 'was she', instead of she was. The poem flows beautifully and changing the two words around enhances the flow.

I would say 'so regal was she.', as it would fit the tempo better. Overall, excellent work here. Congratulations on your Hubbie Award.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 20, 2021:

Thank you, Bill. I had not heard of Viator until a few days ago either. We are learning something new all the time. I am glad you enjoyed Gertie's Curtsy too.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 20, 2021:

Hi Li-Jen. Thank you for your short analysis of the poems. I am glad you liked them, especially Gertie's Curtsy. Yes, history indeed.

Bill De Giulio from Massachusetts on September 20, 2021:

Well done, John. I was not familiar with the Viator style of poetry so I learned something new today. I can see how finding a line to repeat would be a challenge, but you handled it in fine fashion. Really enjoyed the poem about Gertie’s Curtsy.

Li-Jen Hew on September 20, 2021:

Hi Jodah. I believe the special emphasis on burgundy roses made them stand out but without losing its meaning for the couple. You did a good job in proving the reality of the situation for the road more travelled. There was no hope in that. Quirky and light hearted the poem about the curtsy. It became history haha.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 20, 2021:

Thank you so much, Lora. I appreciate your generous comment. Ok, I shall see if I can come up with a fairy tale...not sure about Cinderella, but maybe I can base it on that. Let's see.

Lora Hollings on September 20, 2021:

A wonderful collection of poems, John. I enjoyed your take on "The Road Not Taken," and the poem about Gertie's royal curtsy was very amusing, indeed. How about a poem about a fairy tale? How about Cinderella? Congratulations on your award. You have dedicated so much of your time to hubpages and the community here besides being a very fine poet. It was well deserved.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 20, 2021:

Hi Chitrangada, Thank you as always for following this series. It pleases me that you enjoyed all three poems and that I have introduced you to the 'Viator' style. It was a bit tricky choosing a line that could be continued throughout but I think it worked out ok.

Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on September 20, 2021:

Congratulations once again John, for the Hubbie award, and good to see the 68th edition of this wonderful series.

I liked all the poems, and it’s difficult to choose a favourite. I wasn’t aware about the Viator style of poem, and I am impressed with your composition.

Thank you for sharing another wonderful and creative and delightful piece of writing.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 20, 2021:

Thank you for your very kind words, Rosina. I am so happy that you enjoyed "A Bouquet of Burgundy Roses" as well as the other poems. I hope the eye drops work and you are back writing more than ever. All the best.

Rosina S Khan on September 20, 2021:

John, you are truly a talented poet, and congratulations again on winning the Hubbie award. I really loved and enjoyed my requested poem about Burgundy roses and watched the video with interest. Thank you so much.

The poem "The Path More Traveled" was certainly humorous but "Gertie's Royal Curtsy" was even more fun to read. Thank you for the smiles.

That would be it. My small problem was that I was seeing a moving spot in front of my eye. I have been to the eye doctor, and he has given me an eye drop which I have to use for 3 months. Let's see how that works out. All the best.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 19, 2021:

Thank you...I will try my best

Sankhajit Bhattacharjee from MILWAUKEE on September 19, 2021:

beautiful poetry dear poet...keep up...

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 19, 2021:

It is always great to receive your comment, and thank you form the congratulations (I voted for you by the way.) So glad you loved the poem about Gertie, and enjoyed ‘The Path More Travelled.’

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 19, 2021:

Hello Pamela, yes, you should give a Viator poem a try. I found it quite fun to write. Robert Frost’s poem is one of the classics, and I am happy that you enjoyed “Gertie’s Royal Curtsy.” Thank you for voting for me, and have a great day.

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on September 19, 2021:

Great poetry.

I am so happy you received the Hubby Award.

Your talent is quite evident in all of your work.

Congratulations my friend.

I absolutely love the one with Gertsie.

She'll never live that one down.

I did enjoy the one with the less traveled path too.

Have a great day.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 19, 2021:

Peg, thank you for the congratulations and back at you “best photographer.” I am always up for trying different forms of poetry so glad the first one worked out. I am glad Gertie gave you a smile.

I have only ever written about a racoon once, and that was in my poem ‘See You Soon’ so I shall put that on my list.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 19, 2021:

Hi Amara, good to see your generous comment, and i is much appreciated. Thank you.

Pamela Oglesby from Sunny Florida on September 19, 2021:

Your Hubbie award is well deserved, and yes you had vote. The Viator poem is a new type of poem for me and very unique.I really enjoyed reading it, John.

I liked the Robert Frost poem on taking "The Road Less Traveled" as well. The last poem was so much fun to read. Poor Gertie! You did an excellent job, as always.

I wondered if you had written a poem about owls. They are quite interesting, so that is a suggestion. It is always enjoyable to read your poems.

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on September 19, 2021:

Congratulations again on your award which is well-deserved! I was unfamiliar with that first type of poetry, but you did an excellent job using that first sentence in the different spots of the paragraphs. Your takeoff from that Robert Frost poem was excellent. Being lost and alone in a darkening forest would not be fun. Speaking of fun, that last curtsy poem has me smiling. Oh the horror and shame! Haha!

Have you ever written a poem about the dexterity of raccoons?

Amara from Pakistan on September 19, 2021:

Indeed John, you deserved it, actually you are the best poet. Your poems are masterpieces. Its always a pleasure to read your work.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 19, 2021:

Thank you for continuing to follow this series Umesh. I intend to continue it as long as I can.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 19, 2021:

Thank you Diana. It is a huge compliment that these poems may encourage others.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 19, 2021:

Linda, thank you so much for the kind words about the series. I am very pleased that you enjoy my poetry. I shall add your suggestion to my list. A poem from the old house’s point of view will be an interesting challenge. All the best with the move.

Umesh Chandra Bhatt from Kharghar, Navi Mumbai, India on September 19, 2021:

Great composition. Please keep the porch continued. All the best.

Diana Carol Abrahamson from Somerset West on September 19, 2021:

Loved all your poems John. Poems that speak to the heart and mind. Keep up your poems.They encourage us all.

Linda Lum from Washington State, USA on September 19, 2021:

John, congratulations on your Hubbie award. I enjoyed all of these, but especially Gertie's curtsey. I hope this series never ends.

My husband and I are moving to a new home. What about a poem about moving, not from our point of view but what our old house is feeling as we pack up and leave.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 19, 2021:

Hello Misbah, thanks again for the congratulation. I am glad you liked those poems, and the series in general. Take care and please stay safe yourself.

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 19, 2021:

Hi Teodora, I am so glad you enjoyed these poems and the rhyme, especially ‘Gertie..’ it was fun to write.

Teodora Gheorghe on September 19, 2021:

I like all of them, but my favorite is "Gertie's Royal Curtsy": funny, witty, great rhymes. :)

Misbah Sheikh on September 19, 2021:

First and foremost, huge congrats on receiving the Hubbie Award. You certainly deserve the praise. I am happy on your success.

I enjoyed and loved the Viator poem. The last poem, Gertie's Royal Curtsy, was a real treat. Thank you very much for sharing these beautiful poems with us. I always love the Poems from the Porch series. Thank you to you, your readers, cats, and, of course, your porch. ;) Take care and keep smiling.

Blessings to you

John Hansen (author) from Gondwana Land on September 19, 2021:

Thank you for your continued support and encouragement, Bill. It is friends like you that makes me want to stick around. Glad you love the series and thanks for the “grocery shopping” prompt.

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on September 19, 2021:

This is one of my favorite series. I hope it never ends. Congrats on the Hubbie Award. You were my runaway choice.

I think I gave you some suggestions for the porch poems, but I can't remember what they were. If I didn't, here's another shopping! Have fun!

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