Updated date:

Lucifer's Question


Lucifer's Question

Why am I vilified? Doesn't everyone defy?

I am the bringer of deceit.

The one the pious plan to defeat.

Can one truly hope to prevail,

don't they realize all will fail.

Yet, I must digress,

that simple point is a mess.

You all shall fail just as I.

You all blame me without a sympathetic eye.

You all steal, destroy, and maim.

Why can't you see tis all a game.

No matter what you do wrong you say was in the name of God.

If we are all his creatures then why such hate for me.

I was his favorite before you stole his compassion.

Many could ration the insults they receive.

But I receive so many daily this I don't fancy.

I may have a place for you to stay for being like me.

But you saying its my doing is not true you see.

You were given free will by He.

So any choice you make you make free.

Your voice is meek and mine robust.

You all lie you all lust.

So how can you blame me for all your faults.

I've done nothing since I lost my foolish fight.

Blinded with anger I lost all sight.

I missed the love God once had for me.

Fallen from grace I have so easily.

Power I do possess.

It can not be released unless.

You do wrong you make me strong

but I never made you do anything at all.

I'm tired of the unnecessary anger and resentment toward my name.

They say, "the devil, for shame."

We have all done evil one way or another.

Some to strangers, some to there own brother.

You make your path and decide your fate.

You'll either see me or see the pearly gate.

Remember that hate is a strong word so try to refrain.

Leave me out of it now or if I do see you, you may receive more pain.

End the misguided hate

and leave your future to fate.

You make your past present future not I.

So for now I bid you ado goodbye.

What do you think?

Fallen from Grace


© 2014 Joe


Tanja on June 28, 2020:

I love the poem thank you...Made me cry.

Andrius on October 21, 2019:

Listen Buddy-go home! ❤️

Rel Arkiel on August 26, 2019:

When that I became the Son I taught Wisdom and Signs in to Creation's Heart...When that I became the two...I saw a different point of view...When that I became the Three...I Gathered together the Family Tree...When That I became the four...That Day I became much more...

Joe (author) from north miami FL on November 04, 2016:

Sorry for not having commented sooner haven't been on in a long time thank you all for the comments I do appreciate the advice and critiques.

Leah Warburton on August 07, 2016:

In trying to blame the Devil for every thing we are simply refusing to accept responsibility for our own actions. Good to see this expressed so beautifully, and sympathetically. Also Poetry is about expressing thoughts and feelings. While there are accepted, standard forms for doing so; they are not they only way. Write how You feel. These are Your words, Your thoughts. The message is clear and true. Keep Going.

Byrdmann on February 12, 2015:

The photo is kind of confusing. I understand the poem coming from the mind set of Satan point of view. For some reason it seems that you're making

Lucifer demonic before his fall.

A Poet on January 22, 2015:

This is terrible. I am all for slandering the common interest, but the syllable count and rhyming scheme just hits the ear completely wrong. Don't get me wrong, you're getting there. However, poetry is all about word manipulation. Making something flow into the minds of others as easily as you possibly can. The line breaks and cheesy rhymes seem like you just thought of whatever you could make rhyme and then threw it down. Try using better syllable count and rhyming schemes. Also, you don't have to explain your poetry to other people. It's okay to use ambiguous language. The point is not for you to interpret your mind and put it in a way for others to understand. The point is to put it beautifully and let others interpret it in their own way.

Joe (author) from north miami FL on June 30, 2014:

Very insightful comment and thank you for the grammatical help. I appreciate you taking the time to read and enjoyed your biblical standpoint on the whole piece.

Donald Beres Jr from Valparaiso, Indiana on June 27, 2014:

joedolphin88 I was once at arms with the belief that GOD would destroy the Devil.

Who HE called Satan who was called so by GOD because he as Lucifer had no truth left in him. As Satan was Once a Cherubim of light Or even an Arch Angel of Instruction. Who's name was Lucifer according to all that I have read and heard.

These three are the same entity. I believed once early on that GOD would remake everyone even Satan back as Lucifer. I just had a gut feeling the Devil was getting more credit then he deserved. But with years of study and my new understanding of the Father and the Son.

I see that this will never be allowed again. So even If Satan Aka Lucifer is not destroyed in the Pit of hell or the lake of fire. He will never be the creature that he is today and has been since the fall. For he holds No truth of GOD For he believes himself to be God.

Not ever poem is a technical poem but this does need some defining with line breaks or even some stanza paragraphs. say a grouping of four or 3, 4, or five you can use the (;) as a break also or long pause (,) short brief pause.

You all steal, destroy, and maim

Why can't you see tis all, a game

No matter what you do wrong you say twas in the name; of God

I think this is a 3 line stanza the semi colon carries the rhyme added the t for twas because you used tis

Joe (author) from north miami FL on June 19, 2014:

Thank you very much teaches12345, I appreciate you taking a look into the content and commenting.

Dianna Mendez on June 18, 2014:

Your thoughts are challenging and ones we should all consider when we believe we fall or are tempted. I don't believe it is all the devil's doing when we commit sins. Great article and so poetic.

Joe (author) from north miami FL on May 27, 2014:

I appreciate the comment and love the statement.

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on May 27, 2014:

It is the devil's job to accuse us. Our response should be: (1) Submit to God (2) Resist the devil. Run for refuge and rely on God for the strength to overcome all our bad habits.

That said, your article is very creative!

Joe (author) from north miami FL on May 27, 2014:

I will certainly be breaking the lines up to make more a rhyme scheme so it's not so difficult to read. Thank you for your insightful comment.

Al Wordlaw from Chicago on May 27, 2014:

Great poem joedolphin88, however, as Astra Nomik mentioned, you should put it in a poetic format so that it will flow as poetry should.

Joe (author) from north miami FL on May 27, 2014:

Astra and DDE I want to thank you for your kind words. My poetry has always been in rhyming format and I do enjoy that it has appealed to most who have reviewed it. Thank you for the critiques and I will certainly fix it soon to read more fluently as far as breaks in the sentences go. Thank you all again

Devika Primić from Dubrovnik, Croatia on May 26, 2014:

Great write up here and so interesting of what you thought about here. You shared such lovely photos.

Cathy Nerujen from Edge of Reality and Known Space on May 26, 2014:

Rare to find writing of this quality and with such a voice. It has drama and energy. And from the dark point of view...

One small wish from me would be to have the sentences laid out more as poetry on the page, as it would read and flow better, but I could follow this nicely, as the words just demand to be read. And thank you for checking out my poems and hubs, Joedolphin88

Regarding Lucifer, I think there is good and bad in everyone, but the knowing and how to not do bad things and avoid it and how to control it and even overcome it is something within us all. A wonderful subject to explore.

Joe (author) from north miami FL on May 26, 2014:

Thank you for the help guys I truly do appreciate it.

John Hansen from Gondwana Land on May 26, 2014:

This is great Joe. I love the point of view that the poem expresses, Satan's. It was about time he was allowed to at least express his side of the story. I love the pics you included as well.

The only critique I would make, maybe change the setting out into regular poetry form eg:

"Why am I vilified?

Doesn't everyone defy?

I am the bringer of deceit.

The one the pious plan to defeat."

It makes it easier to read and define as a poem as opposed to prose. Up to you though.

Great work, voted up.

The Examiner-1 on May 26, 2014:

That was written very well Joe, for the wording. It was awesome and had interest and truth. I voted it up and pinned it.

As a poem, my opinion is that it should be broken down so that it is easier for the readers. In other words, break it apart as you write the lines instead of bunching them all together. Also use more punctuation throughout it. Not everyone has the same opinion.

As you read more poetry you will see what I mean.


Joe (author) from north miami FL on May 26, 2014:

Thank you, I appreciate your comment. I just thought writing something with the devil from a different point a view would be a nice change and work into a nice poem.

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on May 26, 2014:

This is awesome! Lucifer is blamed for all sins, not true, man's evil within is the culprit. Love the pictures. Tweeted

Related Articles