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Into the Lake

Justin W. Price, AKA PDXKaraokeGuy, is a freelance writer, blogger, and award-nominated author based out of Juneau, Alaska.

into the lake

recycle the lake

into the lake

empty the lake

into the lake

lost in the lake

into the lake

revenge of the lake

Rambunctious kids jumping—

Pumps under pumping—

Spread eagle sliding—

Swallow fish and algae—

Jumping board to belly—

Confused in the yelling—

Frantic mother jumping—

Face is blue and drowning—

all rights reserved. Copyright Justin W. Price Dec 1 2011



Thanks for Reading.

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© 2011 Justin W Price


Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on January 19, 2012:

Thanks Audrey. Thee cadence of this poem was actually inspired by Native American Fire Dancing

Audrey Howitt from California on January 19, 2012:

Very cool write!!!

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on December 13, 2011:

James, thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed this!

James A Watkins from Chicago on December 13, 2011:

Fascinating. I enjoyed your pithy poem. Thank you for sharing your creative gifts with us.

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on December 09, 2011:

thanks lyricwriter. I really started writing this poem with a mantra in mind. The story ended up taking shape. It's funny what happens when you put a pen to paper.

Richard Ricky Hale from West Virginia on December 08, 2011:

PDX, votes up pal. Love this style. You are very creative and it flows great and level. Good stuff.

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on December 08, 2011:

Jackie, I hadn't heard that story. this certainly wasn't meant to be that dark! Thanks for reading and commenting!

Jackie Lynnley from the beautiful south on December 06, 2011:

Wow so strange to read this when I just read about the little two year old at the bottom of the pool 1/2 hour drowned and now he seems to be better than before the drowning according to his mom.

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on December 05, 2011:

Thank you, Martie. I do like condensed stories :-)

Martie Coetser from South Africa on December 05, 2011:

Interesting presentation - an entire story condensed.

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on December 04, 2011:

business and master, thank u very much. I appreciate your comments!

Movie Master from United Kingdom on December 04, 2011:

Very clever... like it and voting up.

Jo Alexis-Hagues from Lincolnshire, U.K on December 04, 2011:

Once again, well done, we take so many things for granted, use it abuse it, then surprise, surprise it bites back, love it.

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on December 03, 2011:

epi, once again. thanks for your kind words and support. Not sure I could handle beatlemania, thought I wouldn't mind their paychecks...

epigramman on December 03, 2011:

..oh my man I do love this one - then again I love everything you say, write or do - so let's put this on Facebook and with a direct link back here start a new Beatlemania for you and then you'll have to jump into that lake - but these words here in this piece are clever, poignant and so very profound

lake erie time 12:54am listening to Hank Williams Sr.

b. Malin on December 03, 2011:

I guess I was hoping for a Happy Ending...But it sure was a clever play on words. Voted UP!

Cheryl Simonds from Connecticut on December 03, 2011:

profound poem and very sad and tragic.......Makes you think.

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on December 03, 2011:

Thank you all for commenting. I had fun with this poem. It's fun to try new things. As usual, I appreciate all your reads and comments!

Rosemary Sadler from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand on December 03, 2011:

Yes man polutes the thing he enjoys, what we put into something is what we get out of it. revenge...

Very clever

Gypsy Rose Lee from Daytona Beach, Florida on December 03, 2011:

Great poem. Reminds me of why I swim only in pools and only with a large inflatable tire. lol

Just History from England on December 03, 2011:

I did like this! Though not sure about the lake's revenge!!

Eiddwen from Wales on December 03, 2011:

Very clever indeed and has to have an up up and away.

Take care and enjoy your day.


Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on December 03, 2011:

Alexander, thank you very much for reading and commenting. I like your analysis and the way this poem made you think. Cheers and have a nice weekend!

Alexander Pease from Maine on December 02, 2011:

A very dark and intriguing ending. It makes me think about how everything that is done will come back to us.

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on December 02, 2011:

Wow, A day at the beach turns deadly..

Justin W Price (author) from Juneau, Alaska on December 02, 2011:

racin, thank you for reading and commenting

breakfast, thank you for your votes

Sue, you too. Thanks for commenting!

Der, thanks for your interpretation. I wanted to writing a rhyming mantra poem. Never done it before

Derdriu on December 02, 2011:

PDXKaraokeGuy: What an entrancing, hypnotizing, mesmerizing poetic warning of the tragic thoughtlessness of people in the context of wounded wildlife!

Thank you for sharing, voted up, etc.,


Sueswan on December 02, 2011:


A fun happy day turned into a tragedy.

Voted up and awesome.

Have a good weekend.

breakfastpop on December 02, 2011:

Loved this! Up interesting and awesome...

raciniwa from Talisay City, Cebu on December 02, 2011:

it's kinda mind boggling for me...are these riddles? but yeah, i agree that lake has lots of benefits for us...

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