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Girl in the Rain


Once there was a girl who was walking under the rain


Soaked up

Tears flowing on her face with the rain drops

Thunders rumbling

She got more scared

Lightning striking

Still she walked alone

Along the way

She met someone

Quite hard to explain

But she forgot the gray sky

There were sunshine and rainbows

Fireflies and butterflies

She realized she burned again

The rain fell again

This time washing away the fire

Flames of love turned to ashes

Once again, there she was…

Walking under the rain

Alone and soaked up

Tears flowing on her face with the rain drops

Flashbacks of dancing under the rain

With the reason of her smile

Didn’t care who could see ‘em

Swirling round and round

Once there was a girl who loved the rain so much

Sweet memories couldn’t bring back the smile

Warm tears flowed instead

Breaking her gentle heart

Coz no more dancing now

Once there was a girl

Who loved dancing in the rain

Hope she could burn again….

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Joy56 on September 07, 2014:

Love love love it.... Beautiful...... You know the feeling you get when you read a beautiful poem..... I have it x 10

Dark Heart on August 18, 2014:

Oooh-that poem hurt it was so good.

David Charles from New York on March 01, 2014:

DID YOU EVEN RE READ THIS, i can tell, why would i ever finish reading it?

Veronicarain from Cincinnati, Ohio on June 22, 2013:

Great poetry is just flowing and I am so glad I started a hubpage. You make me have to read it twice because it just gives you stacks of thought provoking enjoyment. Have a great weekend.

Devika Primić from Dubrovnik, Croatia on March 19, 2013:

Awesome poetry with great meaning, and you did it so well

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on March 13, 2013:

I'm trying to put intrigue once in a while hehe. I'm glad you like it, Anna. Yes, there are rainbows in my life now and more beside. Have a sweet day!

Anna Haven from Scotland on March 13, 2013:

Your poetry has many layers and meanings running through it. Interesting and thought provoking. I hope you have rainbows in your sky now :)

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on January 28, 2013:

Yes it was..and it's been so long ago. I think we all have gone through those moments. I'm so happy with my life now..and yes, dancing again :) It's amazing to know what readers see in a poem. It's like seeing a part of who they are. Thank you, Wolf :)

Eric T. Shortridge from MidWest on January 27, 2013:

I hope this isn't an autobiography... and that you are dancing again... it's a brilliant poem, because it is so real... and one that many can relate to these days... Hope you are well and staying warm this winter night

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on June 28, 2011:

Thank you so much :)

Two Poles from Morgantown, West Virginia on June 28, 2011:

So will be the love of my life...great work!

nishu on May 25, 2011:


K.A.E Grove from Australia on December 08, 2010:

beautiful, heartbreaking imagery, a lovely poem !

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on November 16, 2010:

Thank you :)

Karrak from Michigan on November 16, 2010:

Beautiful poem!

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on October 20, 2010:

Cheers! Thanks Always Exploring ;)

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on October 20, 2010:

Very sad but beautiful, enjoyed.


Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on October 05, 2010:

Thank you Kavita :) You're a very good editor ;)

Kavita Kapoor from London on October 04, 2010:

This is beautiful though, you may want to slightly edit a couple of words to help this flow better. Something like:

Once there was a girl, walking in the rain


Soaked up

Tearful rain drops flowing on her face

Rumbling thunder

She got scared

Lightning strikes

Still, she walked alone

Just my opinion of course, but either way, this is a very powerful piece and I enjoyed this very much

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on July 27, 2010:

thank you kennynext :)

kennynext from Everywhere on July 27, 2010:

A great poem that all should enjoy

cosette on March 04, 2010:

cool, Blaise...

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on February 14, 2010:

thanks my sweet friend Mik! :) Happy V day!

Micky Dee on February 14, 2010:

I thought I'd wander over and say HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY-QT!

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on February 13, 2010:


you're here again :)


you spelled it right ;) glad you liked it. Thanks so much.

needs_a_break on February 12, 2010:

oh wow i loved it!! simple yet profound... hmm i doubt i spelt that right oh well lol.. but ya.. i loved it, it had so much feeling and depth, i loved the msg as well can't wait to read more :)

Moulik Mistry from Burdwan, West Bengal, India on February 12, 2010:

Lovely poem, great imagery - keep writing more...

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on February 12, 2010:

thanks Moulik Mistry :)

Moulik Mistry from Burdwan, West Bengal, India on February 11, 2010:

Loved its simple words, very well done...

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on February 10, 2010:

hello Invictus! I missed you ;p Ah, the rain..quite interesting to draw lots of perspective. But my fave would be curling up under the sheets during rainy days lol

Thanks my friend! :)

I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s on February 10, 2010:

Lovely poem, blaise! :) you take us on quite a heartfelt journey. I love the rain and it's great to incorporate the imagery. Enjoyable to captrure other perspectives of it too. :)

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on February 09, 2010:

ow thank you Cupid :)

cupid51 from INDIA on February 09, 2010:

"Sweet memories couldn’t bring back the smile" - What a powerful expression! I really loved it!

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on February 09, 2010:


thanks so much :)


I have to thank your Cheeky Girl for pointing you up to my hubs :) I gotta read yours, too..It is nice meetin you two.

glad you liked it. THANKS again Cath! :)

Cathy Nerujen from Edge of Reality and Known Space on February 09, 2010:

Cheeky Girl pointed me in this direction. Wow! Strong and beautiful images of the girl in the rain. That sense of being left in the moment and we are at its mercy, somehow. I like the message at the end too.

Karen Russell on February 09, 2010:


Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on February 09, 2010:

wow, thanks CM :) always good to see you

carolina muscle from Charlotte, North Carolina on February 09, 2010:

This is a pretty little poem!

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on February 08, 2010:

Thanks a lot peptalk and Tammy :) Yah, the rain, no matter what,is a beautiful imagery..

Tammy Lochmann on February 08, 2010:

Cry in the rain so no one notices.

peptalk on February 08, 2010:

This is nice...

The tears and rain are great imagery.

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on February 07, 2010:

so so good to see you here :) Thank you Dim. God bless :)

Fehl Dungo (author) from close to you... on February 07, 2010:

last time I saw you, you were in Jealous avenue :)

yup yup words flow much often when the heart squeeze..THANKS so much for the beautiful comments Micky! :)

Dim Flaxenwick from Great Britain on February 07, 2010:

Really well written for such personal and heartbreaking content. So, So, good. peace.x

Micky Dee on February 07, 2010:

This is very nice. There's nothing like love or the absence that helps words flow. They sometimes intermingle with tears. Thanks for beautiful poetry.

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