Final Journey-The Last Walk
Nithya Venkat enjoys writing about nature and different aspects of life in the form of poetic verses.
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A poem capturing the horror during the bygone days when the servants were buried alive with their dead Pharoah.
The servants had no choice, nor did they have the voice to protest against the cruel, merciless power that ruled them.
The poor servants were marched to death along with their Pharaoh.
The Pharoah
Dressed in gold
Silver, rubies, diamonds
Clothed in the finest robes
Ruby red drawn-out lips
Pale, deathly white cheeks
Splash of amber decorating eyelids
Shades of black highlighting closed eyes
Grandeur and celebration
The final ceremony for the Pharoah
Life's last breath drawn out
Lifeless body lays
His slaves
Lined row by row
With bated breath
Sad eyes dripping tears
Lips trembling quiver
Fearing to utter
The dreaded words
The eternal goodbye.
One by one
Forced to drink
Sweet liquid of death
Slowly seeping down
Strangling drawing out
Gasping for breath
Bidding a painful farewell
A final goodbye
To life on earth
Plunged into the dark
The silence of the dead
© 2013 Nithya Venkat
Comments
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on June 05, 2020:
Thank you Brenda.
BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on June 05, 2020:
You did a great job on this one.
Each line pulls me in with detailed descriptions.
Wonderful.
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on May 30, 2016:
ChitrangadaSharan thank you and yes it somewhat similar.
Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on May 30, 2016:
Excellent poem with some sad historical facts! I have read and seen in movies about the life of slaves in earlier times but I was not aware of this cruel practice. Sounds similar to the "Sati pratha"!
Thank you for sharing this!
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on September 03, 2014:
Jodah thank you.
John Hansen from Gondwana Land on September 03, 2014:
Wonderful poem on a very different but interesting subject. You capture perfectly what it must have been like for the slaves.
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on September 02, 2014:
vocalcoach thank you for your appreciation, you made my day!! Thanks for the vote and share too.
DealForALiving thank you for reading and yes it is ugly reality.
Nick Deal from Earth on September 02, 2014:
It's not easy using well-crafted words and beautiful language to tackle an ugly reality, so thank you!
Audrey Hunt from Pahrump NV on September 01, 2014:
This poem is amazing and no easy accomplishment. The photos add just the right finishing touch. Voted up ++ and sharing.
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on August 31, 2014:
ChitrangadaSharan thank you!
Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on August 31, 2014:
Very nicely expressed and what a great theme!
Amazing pictures and composition---truly moving! Very well done and thanks!
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on February 27, 2014:
Harishprasad thank you.
Harish Mamgain from New Delhi , India on February 27, 2014:
Life in Pharoah and life in slaves - one out and one still vibrating with full of fright and after some moments- both merging into one. To feel for those helpless slaves is really commendable. Vellur, great work.
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on October 20, 2013:
Sueswan thank you for your visit and vote up.
Sueswan on October 20, 2013:
Hi Vellur
Awesome writing filled with vivid imagery. I felt the fear of the slave as they were forced to drink the "sweet liquid of death."
Voted up and awesome
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on September 02, 2013:
rdsparrowriter thank you.
Rochelle Ann De Zoysa from Moratuwa, Sri Lanka on September 01, 2013:
Awesome hub Nithya. I love it and I'm a big fan of ancient Egypt things... very interesting :) Voted up and awesome!
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on August 31, 2013:
Vinaya thank you, have a great weekend.
Vinaya Ghimire from Nepal on August 30, 2013:
Nithya,
this is very creative. I liked the theme, word pictures and metaphors.
Have a great weekend.
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on August 24, 2013:
AudreyHowitt thank you.
teaches12345 thank you.
Dianna Mendez on August 18, 2013:
Very creative angle on this thought.
Audrey Howitt from California on August 16, 2013:
Very nicely done Vellur!
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on August 12, 2013:
MrsBrownsParlour thank you for stopping by and leaving a lovely comment.
MrsBrownsParlour on August 11, 2013:
You brought this experience to life in your vivid, intuitive poem! ~Lurana
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on August 10, 2013:
suzettenaples thank you. History has many stories to tell.
Suzette Walker from Taos, NM on August 10, 2013:
Wonderful poem! This transported me back to the pharoah days of Egypt. Very engaging poem. It is interesting to imagine what life and death was like back then and your poem illuminates this for us. Well done!
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on August 08, 2013:
Eiddwen thank you and have a great day.
Gypsy Rose Lee thank you.
Gypsy Rose Lee from Daytona Beach, Florida on August 08, 2013:
Voted up. Great poem.
Eiddwen from Wales on August 08, 2013:
Cool hub and thank you for sharing.
Wonderful and thanks for sharing further.
Enjoy your day.
Eddy.
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on August 07, 2013:
Rosemay50 thank you for your visit. Thanks for the vote and share.
Rosemary Sadler from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand on August 07, 2013:
Awesome poem. You have done a great job in getting across the emotions of the slaves preparing for death.
Up and more and shared
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on August 07, 2013:
Blossom SB thank you. Yes, things have improved by leaps and bounds.
midget38, thank you. It is just as you have stated, very cruel.
Michelle Liew from Singapore on August 06, 2013:
Ancient civilization.....beautiful yet cruel!
Bronwen Scott-Branagan from Victoria, Australia on August 06, 2013:
Such a good poem about an unusual topic. It's also a useful reminder that some things have improved over the ages. I love your images, too.
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on August 05, 2013:
Jackie Lynnley thank you. Yes we hardly give a thought to such things.
vocalcoach thank you for reading, the votes and share. Much appreciated.
always exploring thank you for your lovely comments and share. You made my day!!
prasetio30 thank you for your visit. Thanks for the vote too.
travmaj thank you for stopping by and leaving a lovely comment.
travmaj from australia on August 05, 2013:
Good work - mixing poetry and history and creating such a powerful poem. Thank you -
prasetio30 from malang-indonesia on August 05, 2013:
Beautiful poem of ancient history. I love it. Thanks for sharing. Voted up :-)
Prasetio
Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on August 05, 2013:
I watched the entire video, very interesting. Your poetry is outstanding.. Thank you for sharing a look back in ancient history. Loved it and sharing...
Audrey Hunt from Pahrump NV on August 05, 2013:
How marvelous this poetry is! I'm a big history lover. Big votes and sharing. ~ Audrey
CrisSp from Sky Is The Limit Adventure on August 05, 2013:
One word Vellur: Brilliant!
Jackie Lynnley from the beautiful south on August 05, 2013:
Great poem, for things we never give thought to. I like it. ^
Nithya Venkat (author) from Dubai on August 05, 2013:
Kathryn Stratford thank you, have a wonderful day.
billybuc thank you for stopping by, history has so many stories that can be brought to life through new words.
Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on August 05, 2013:
I love you imagination, taking something from history and bringing it to life...well done my friend.
Kathryn from Windsor, Connecticut on August 05, 2013:
This is a cool poem showing what it must be like for those who participate in that ceremony.
Thanks for sharing this with us, and have a wonderful day!
~ Kathryn
