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A Midnight Rendezvous - the 32nd Psalm

John has been writing poetry since his school days. He was awarded "Poet of the Year 2014" Hubby Awards and has had two poems become songs.

Medium-format nitrate negative by Esther Bubley

Medium-format nitrate negative by Esther Bubley

How to Classify This Poem?

I'm not sure how to classify this poem. it is definitely on the dark side but a little quirky. I guess you'll just have to read it and judge for yourself. I have a feeling you will either love it or hate it, but I welcome feedback in the comments.

UPDATE! I decided to submit this poem to the recent Wildsound Festival where it was read by a professional actor and published on YouTube. Please watch and listen to the video below. I hope you enjoy the reading.

Baffled!

I have always considered this poem perhaps the best I have ever written. There is a quite an interesting and controversial story told within the verse. The number and quality of comments also suggest it is one of my most highly prized works.

Why then, may I ask, is it continually losing its featured status? I have many other hubs with less frequent traffic that have never become defeatured. Maybe HubPages have a problem with the subject matter ... but that is for me to wonder about I guess.

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A Midnight Rendezvous - the 32nd Psalm

'Twas midnight when I chose to wander

Down the dark foreboding streets.

For my failed attempt at slumber

Is just one more of my defeats.


Street lights shone upon the pavement,

Though dimly through the heavy smog.

My sense acute to every movement,

What was that? .. Oh, just a dog!


Hat pulled down to meet my collar,

Shoulders hunched against the cold.

Gloved hands fumble for a dollar,

At times like this, I feel so old.

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The late-night diner's sign says "OPEN",

I push through the creaking door.

The city hasn't yet awoken,

A cleaner sweeps the grimy floor.


A board above the cafe's counter

In chalk says "Special of the Day".

I brace myself for the encounter,

Like a sinner who's about to pray.


Her eyes survey me as I enter,

The smell of coffee fills the air.

I am not here for idle banter,

But lift my hat and smooth my hair.


"Black!" The only word that's spoken.

The woman looks at me and grins.

The coins I have are just a token

To help absolve me of my sins.

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I lift a chair from off a table

Far back in the darkened room.

Coffee helps to keep me stable

But doesn't help expel the gloom.


I rest my chin upon my arms,

Start to contemplate my life.

Then she strolls over with her charms,

"Is there anything else you'd like?"


My only friend, no not quite that,

In this garbage bin of life.

I give a nod and tip my hat

To my twenty dollar wife.

I take a note from out my coat,

At least to pay I'm able.

She kneels down on the vinyl floor

And crawls beneath the table.


Not a single word is said,

My money coats her palm.

She smiles and bows her pretty head,

I recite my favourite psalm.


I put my troubles to arm's length

For just the shortest time.

This brief encounter gives me strength

For the mountains I must climb.


I stand to leave, my conscience clear,

As she sits and wipes her mouth.

I close the swinging cafe door

And walk towards the south.

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Arriving home I shower and dress,

Then take some time to pray.

All my sins I must confess,

It is the Sabbath day.


At church, I give my sermon

About avarice and greed,

How the Bible has the answers

That all of us should heed.


Never judge your fellow man,

If you sin don't cast a stone.

You cannot walk in other's shoes,

You must face the Lord alone.


None of us are perfect,

But God forgives our sins,

So live your life the best you can

And leave the rest to Him.


My friends, if life gets desperate

And you think you'll do some harm,

Just open up "The Word of God"

Read the 32nd Psalm.


© 2014 John Hansen

Comments

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on October 01, 2020:

Thank you John.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on October 01, 2020:

I was just thinking “I haven’t seen Ruby in awhile..and hope she’s ok.” I am so sorry to hear you have been feeling down. It is so hard to get over losing anyone close let alone one of our children. I am happy that this gave you a lift though. You will get through this it just takes time.

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on October 01, 2020:

John, I've been down for so long, can't seem to get over my son's death, have no desire to write or read others offerings, but for some reason this story/poem lifts me. It is a masterpiece and should be read by every person. Now I will read the 32 psalm again. Thank you for sharing your meaningful poetry.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on October 01, 2020:

Thank you. Much appreciated.

LaZeric Freeman from Hammond on October 01, 2020:

Nice. The imagery is everything.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 25, 2020:

Hey Paul, great to see you here. Yes, I do still agree this is at least up there with the best. I may have done one or two since that I’d place almost on par but I’ll always be proud of this one.

Paul Neglia from Poughkeepsie, NY USA on June 24, 2020:

Wow John, yeah this is a different type of poem than what I am used to from you. I can see why you would think this as one of your best. I might have to agree with you. So much emotion and topped off with some relief and a little religion and a great message of dont judge. Excellent work. One last question do you still think this is your best work or has it been topped by something new?

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 10, 2020:

Ruby, thank you so much for revisiting this poem. It has always, and will always be one of my works that I am most proud of. This was a departure from nothing I had written before, and shaped many of my more recent works. No, we shouldn’t judge anyone, no matter what their position or profession. After all, we are all humans and none of us are perfect. Have a great day.

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on June 10, 2020:

I came to read this again, and I received the same message. " Leave all judgements to God. " Instead of passing judgement on the Minister, know that he was troubled and had a desire not fit for a man who teaches sin is wrong. God knows each of our heart's. No man or woman is above sin. John, I still think this is your best. You were able to write deeply about a subject that's taboo, and yet, the reader sympathizes with a Minister who went to God, asking for forgiveness.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 25, 2019:

Thank you for the wonderful comment, Ruby. I have always felt that this was one of the best poems I have written. Yes, “Do not judge” is the big lesson here. Blessings to you.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 25, 2019:

Shyron, I thought this was the one you meant. I admit it isn’t for the prudish but the people at Senior Centre May surprise you. I hope so anyway. Good luck with the reading.

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on December 25, 2019:

Oh my goodness, I'm sitting here with tears in my eyes.' Do not judge' is the most important aspect of this wonderful poem. We should read this at least once a year. You are such a dear poet. Happiness my friend.

Shyron E Shenko from Texas on December 25, 2019:

Thank you John, this is the one I was talking about. I plan to read it at the Senior Center when we meet this month, I don't know if the old prudes can take it, but to me it is one of the best poems I have read.

Blessings my friend.

Tamara Moore on July 05, 2017:

Brilliant! A magnificent poem with a catchy rhythm, and such wise words at the core. Thank you!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 30, 2017:

Hi Finn,

Thanks for your wonderful comment.

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Fin from Barstow on June 29, 2017:

a very interesting piece with just the right hint of darkness. It took a few for me to realize what was really happening and I had to go back and look and quite a subject for a piece....but done nicely the way you hint and demonstrate and avoid the vulgar.

(i'm a little curious...where exactly is this cafe located? I'm seeking a good cup of coffee)

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on October 12, 2016:

Hey, Dan ('Zilla) thanks for such a generous comment. Yes, I was stoked to have this selected to be read by an actor at a festival and recorded. What did you mean by borrowed piece..the fact that I used Poe's Raven as a guide for the metre? I still feel this is one of my best works, as it seems do many others from the comments. Hope all is going great for you and I look forward to a new hub from you too.

Dan W Miller from the beaches of Southern California now living in Phoenix since 2000 on October 12, 2016:

Wow, John I'm nearly speechless. The poem speaks directly to me (at least at this point in my life.) Your approach, presentation and in knowing a bit of you makes this borrowed piece all your's now. You own it. It is flawless.

I admit the noir imagery is what caught my eye and immediate attention and then to see it was you, my friend, well I just had to delve deeper.

What a thrill it must be to have displayed this for a competition and have other poets appreciate your talent makes me excited and proud FOR you.

Of course, we won't readily admit it, but to have others accept you is the normal and maybe the ultimate instinctive feeling of belonging - which we all crave. And just look at all the love in the many comments.

(Oh, and a hearty congrats on your Hubbie. Well deserved indeed.)

'Zilla

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on October 10, 2016:

What a wonderful comment, Chitrangada. Yes, I was pleased that this poem seemed to convey my message "not to judge by appearances", and excited to have it read on YouTube. Have a great week.

Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on October 10, 2016:

Excellent hub and the message is the best of all. We cannot and we should not judge anyone because we do not know about their journey and we have not been in their situation.

This is a powerful poem with a lesson for everyone. How exciting for you to have your poem read and displayed on YouTube. Congratulations and thanks for sharing!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on October 08, 2016:

Ruby, thank you for revisiting this hub as well. When I had the YouTube video made I had the option of having it made into a short film with real actors but I couldn't afford it. Would have been interesting though. I appreciate the kind comment.

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on October 08, 2016:

I'm so glad Shyron shared this on the feed forum. I know I read it two years ago, but it's so good I had to read it again. Your words/ rhyme was like watching an old movie. I think this is your very best. I know it's dark, but life is dark sometimes, and you captured a lonely night and a chance meeting perfectly...

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on October 08, 2016:

It is funny, Shyron. After I wrote this poem I felt that this was the very best writing I could do, and in fact wrote another hub asking the question "https://hubpages.com/literature/Youve-Reached-Your...

I still don't think I have written anything to better this, others may disagree but that is how I feel. Glad you enjoyed it.

Shyron E Shenko from Texas on October 08, 2016:

John, this is by far my favorite of all your poems.

Blessings

Michael-Milec on October 06, 2016:

John, this is one those ever inspiring, nourishing a soul and uplifting the spirit.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on October 05, 2016:

Dana, I couldn't ask for a better comment. This is probably my favourite too. Thanks for your continued support.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on October 05, 2016:

Thank you, Nadine. So glad you enjoyed the reading of my poem. Have a great day.

Dana Tate from LOS ANGELES on October 05, 2016:

Amazing doesn't begin to describe this poem. This is my favorite, hail to the king.

Nadine May from Cape Town, Western Cape, South Africa on October 05, 2016:

What a great way to listen to your story poem. Very moving

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on October 30, 2015:

Thanks for that info Bill. I know they distribute in Australia because my wife used to be subscribed to audio books through them. I'll let you know.

Bill Russo from Cape Cod on October 30, 2015:

I don't know. But they probably have The Raven and similar works. It may be a small niche, but perhaps one that you could dominate. At any rate, I think it bears investigation. I am not even certain about the distribution channels but I imagine it to be world wide. I was also thinking you could do a book of short stories. I know short stories don't sell as well as novellas and novels, but I have a feeling that much of the audio listening is done in autos during commutes and trips and it seems to me that a short form piece will work better than one that drones on for 12 hours. That's what I am counting on in my book. It's more than a dozen complete short stories and articles. The reading (listening) time is four hours; but each chunk will take only about a half hour. Please let me know how you make out if you decide to get involved.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on October 30, 2015:

Thanks Bill, for that amazing comment and encouragement. I also felt this was perhaps the best poem I have ever written. I wrote a hub "You've Reached Your Writing Summit. Where to Now? Is the Only Way, Down?" after writing this. I felt I could never do better.

Wow, congratulations on getting that voice actor through audible and him doing it all for free. I may have to check them out. Do you think they would do a book of poetry or short stories though?

Bill Russo from Cape Cod on October 30, 2015:

Blessed is the man who writes tomes every day; for his poetry lights the road to guide our way. John this is your finest work. I read the poem and then watched the Youtube video and immediately clicked the Share button to send it out to those with whom I share a Facebook connection. The work is flat out ten of ten. Now this leads me to another thing I have been meaning to talk to you about. My first audio book is coming out. It is an oral presentation of a book I wrote that sells between 30 and 80 e-book copies a month on Amazon and five or six paperbacks in the same period. I did some research on Audible and left a message on their site that I was looking for a narrator for my book. Within a day, a well known New York voice actor got back to me. He is producing the book at no cost to me. All I had to do was make the book's cover. He is doing all the rest including submitting the final work to Audible, Amazon and I-tunes. We are going to split the royalties evenly. He sent me a one minute audition and I was shattered !! !! It was so good. A week or two later he sent me the first 15 minutes just to make sure I liked it. The book is called The Creature From the Bridgewater Triangle. It's a collection of some of my historical fiction along with my sighting of a strange creature in an area called America's Bermuda Triangle, The Bridgewater Triangle. Check out Audible John. With your talent, I have no doubts that you will be able to develop something that could do very well. I am not sure how many audio books I will sell, but even if I only sell a few, it's going to be a huge treat for me to give copies to my grand kids at Christmas. PS....if you publish an audio book, I will read it and give it a stellar review.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 02, 2015:

Thank you Surabhi.

Surabhi Kaura on August 02, 2015:

Beautifully written!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 11, 2015:

Thanks Shyron.

Shyron E Shenko from Texas on June 11, 2015:

John, know my friend will like this. I enjoyed listening to you read this. It is really fantastic.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 11, 2015:

Thanks for revisiting Shyron. I hope your friend likes it.

Shyron E Shenko from Texas on June 11, 2015:

John, I thought of this the other day and could not remember the name of it, I wanted to tell a friend about it. It is awesome and interesting, voted that way and sharing this.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 10, 2015:

Thank you Sunshine. I am glad you enjoyed the reading. Yes, it is exciting. Much appreciated.

Linda Bilyeu from Orlando, FL on June 10, 2015:

Congrats! How exciting for you to have your poem read and displayed on YouTube for all to see! The actor displayed the emotions of your poem to a T. Fantastic poetry as always! :)

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 10, 2015:

I am resharing this hub because I submitted it to the recent Wildsound Festival where it was read by a professional actor and videoed. It is now on You Tube and I have added that video here at the top of the hub. I hope you enjoy the reading.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on June 10, 2015:

I am resharing this hub because I submitted it to the recent Wildsound Festival where it was read by a professional actor and videoed. It is now on You Tube and I have added that video here at the top of the hub. I hope you enjoy the reading.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on March 25, 2015:

Thank you Matty, much appreciated.

Matty Navarro from New Jersey on March 25, 2015:

very nice!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on March 23, 2015:

Hi Linda, it's a great compliment for a reader to revisit a hub. Thanks for sharing and voting up a second time. Much appreciated.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on March 23, 2015:

Thanks again Hannah David, that's a great comment. Don't worry about the double post, my brain needs coffee to activate too.

Linda Rogers from Minnesota on March 23, 2015:

I read this for the second time because I was so captivated the first time. I just love everything about it. Its' surprise ending, the flow and meter, and the powerful message in the poem. Wowsa. Sharing all over, voted up and hit all buttons except funny.

Hannah David Cini from Nottingham on March 23, 2015:

Sorry, I meant to edit my last comment because I pressed send to soon but my computer froze so I passed the five minute limit (bad IT night for me :). ). I meant to say I can understand why it's a favorite, it's great as a whole. I loved the first 3 verses especially because they remind me of when I used to live in London and had really bad insomnia so would go for walks round the suburbs in the early hours. It's like a completely different world at that time. I liked the last 3 a lot too, a really interesting twist. Sorry for the double post, I need to stop trying to work without coffee in my system.

Hannah David Cini from Nottingham on March 23, 2015:

Great as a whole but the first 3 and last 3 verses. I am looking forward to reading more of your work.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on March 23, 2015:

Thanks for reading Hannah David and for the kind comment. This is one of my personal favourites too.

Hannah David Cini from Nottingham on March 23, 2015:

I love this. I love midnight wanders and you captured it so beautifully. Voted up and shared.

Linda Rogers from Minnesota on March 13, 2015:

LOL-the weird stuff is what helps the creative process. I so love Edgar Allan Poe. What a great piece to listen to get the creative juices flowing.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on March 12, 2015:

Hi Minnetonka, glad you enjoyed this poem. Yes to me it felt like a story in a poem too. I don't even know how I came up with the idea. I had listened to Edgar Allan Poe's "Raven" not long before, so had that going around in my head so the meter of this is similar, but who know what sparked the story line. I obviously have some weird stuff going around in my head. :)

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on March 12, 2015:

Thank you Peg, I find I need to intersperse my inspirational upbeat hubs with darker ones now and then. You need to display and feel a variety of emotions especially as a writer. Yes, it is about portraying the human condition. You shouldn't be afraid to publish some of your "darker" work here, but if you do set up a blog page please give me a link.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on March 12, 2015:

Hi Jackie, when you have the urge to write about a controversial subject you tend to toss it around in your head for awhile and sometimes decide it's better not to publish. I used to be like this but decided why write something that you are proud of and not let others see it. This is about the human condition and it is probably the poem of mine I like the most. It's funny all my 'darker' writing seems to evoke some sense of excitement at the outcome. You really should republish that poem of yours. I like to be shocked. Thanks for the vote up.

Linda Rogers from Minnesota on March 12, 2015:

Wow John-this piece of writing has everything: to me, it was flash fiction in a poem. I tend to thoroughly enjoy dark poetry. Fantastic twist at the end!

Peg Cole from Northeast of Dallas, Texas on March 12, 2015:

Nicely done, John. Descriptive and dark it shines light on the human condition. Makes me want to republish my dark one too. Perhaps a blog page for the darkness in which we sometimes dwell.

Jackie Lynnley from the beautiful south on March 12, 2015:

I love this touch on poetry people generally shy away from and this is so well done. I use to have some like it here, I should put it back and shock a few more people huh? lol This is just a reminder of what a great poet you are and am sure glad I spotted you to get to enjoy it; for you do the very style I like too!

as always ^+

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on October 17, 2014:

Thank you Sandy, your visit and kind comment are much appreciated.

Sandy Mertens from Frozen Tundra on October 17, 2014:

I really enjoyed the poem and the photos that you chose to go with it.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on September 06, 2014:

Thank you for reading this lambservant. Good to see a new face.

Lori Colbo from Pacific Northwest on September 06, 2014:

Wow. Look forward to reading more of your poetry.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 22, 2014:

Thanks Eric, that's a big compliment.

Eric Wayne Flynn from Providence, Rhode Island on August 22, 2014:

You know you like a poem when you wish you wrote it. My favorite of yours.

EWF

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 17, 2014:

Hi Maria, there is no prize for being the first to read a hub :) . I think it's really great to get a comment out of the blue on a hub where the comments seem to have died down. So thank you, Also thank you for the kind and wonderful comment. I look forward to hearing from you.

Hope you have been having a great weekend too.

Maria Jordan from Jeffersonville PA on August 16, 2014:

Dear John,

I'm glad to come to this poem 'on the late side' to read the sincerely well-deserved, positive comments on this piece.

Like a compelling piece of fiction, your poetry pulls me in from the start.

"I give a nod and tip my hat. To my twenty dollar wife." Your words leave no doubt in your reader's mind.

I appreciate the irony, the humanity and the reality in your poetic story. And I totally agree with these fine comments before me...

I 'll be writing you - thanks for your reply on your other hub.

Have a great weekend. Hugs, Maria

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 11, 2014:

Thanks for coming to read this Anna, and for your kind and encouraging comment.

Anna Haven from Scotland on August 11, 2014:

Very clever twist and the imagery matched your black and white photographs really well.

You are right to be proud Jodah, great work. I am sure your future work will also fly this high, keep on writing and believing. You have got it.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 10, 2014:

Thank you again Phyllis. I will definitely heed your advice.

Phyllis Doyle Burns from High desert of Nevada. on August 10, 2014:

Exceptional writing expressing the way it sometimes is in dark places. There are dark sides in life and it is easy to look away and not see that lonely souls have a way of finding each other.

Don't be concerned about "matching" or topping this one, Jodah. Just let it be and let it have its moment till the next best one comes along.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 09, 2014:

Thank you Will, yes the world can be a dark place and the people in it far from perfect. Sometimes you have to show that side too. Appreciate you reading this.

WillStarr from Phoenix, Arizona on August 09, 2014:

Whoa! What a dark and dismal picture you word-paint of our many failings. Outstanding, Jodah.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 08, 2014:

Thank you so much Shyron. My only problem is that I don't know if I can match this one in future.

Shyron E Shenko from Texas on August 08, 2014:

Wow, awesome John, I am amazed, Voted up, UABI and shared. Amazing.

Jamie Lee Hamann from Reno NV on August 06, 2014:

What poetry Jodah! Fantastic how you spun the story and beautifully closed with such elegance. Jamie

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 05, 2014:

Thanks so much teaches. I am glad this poem was inspirational and faith-building. That was what I hoped for despite my somewhat unconventional approach. I thought it would have more effect, and it did get people to read the 32nd Psalm..even myself.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 05, 2014:

Thank you for taking the time to read this poem Max and for your insightful comment and words of encouragement. It means a lot coming from a writer as experienced and accomplished as yourself. You explained the essence of this poem perfectly.

Dianna Mendez on August 05, 2014:

I loved how you wrote this and brought out the meaning on this Psalm. We are never out of God's reach, even when you have fallen from grace. Thanks for the inspiration and faith-building words.

Max Havlick from Villa Park, Illinois on August 05, 2014:

Thanks for this fine piece of work, Jodah. Fay and I both agree on that.

It always seems to surprise a lot of people that ministers do the same things that everyone else does (which some people call "sins"). No wonder the Great Disconnect at Sunday church meetin', where ministers and hearers often appear not to understand each other.

But the good news, with so many well-informed people now on the job noticing forgiveness available to everyone, including ministers, it gives God a well-deserved break, an extra day off, so to speak. Thanks to the modern church's wide distribution of Hebrew and Christian sacred writings, He can rest now on both Saturday AND Sunday!

Max Havlick (alive 80 years + 8 months, so I've been there, I've seen it, I've lived it!), Chicago west surburbs, Tuesday, August 5, 2014

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 04, 2014:

Hi Audrey, I appreciate your comment and have a feeling you may be seeing more of my dark side in future :)

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 04, 2014:

Thank your for reading this CMHypno, and for your insightful comment. I wish everyone could have that point of view and the world would be a better place.

Audrey Howitt from California on August 04, 2014:

I like this darker side to your work John. There is a quirky edge to this and I tend to love the unexpected in poetry--

CMHypno from Other Side of the Sun on August 04, 2014:

Wow and how unexpected Jodah. I think much of the pain we suffer comes from having expectations of others. If we could all just accept each other in all our diverse behaviours and beliefs, we could all drop the masks and show our true selves to the world. None of us are perfect and if we actually did love unconditionally (rather than just talk about it!) not so many people would feel pushed out and judged.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 04, 2014:

Thanks once again Frank for reading my hubs and your encouragement. Glad you liked this one.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 04, 2014:

Thank you for reading fpherj48, and for the kind comment. Yes I thought JD was a good choice as well. I could visualise him as I was writing this.

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on August 04, 2014:

Jodah you took the 32nd to a creative level... I second fpher.. brilliant :)

Suzie from Carson City on August 04, 2014:

Jodah....This is stunning.....You have a gift, my friend. I will confess, as your poem suggests....within the darkness, a Light shone through.....

Brilliant. Ohhhhh.. "James Dean"....the perfect choice.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 04, 2014:

Hey travmaj, thank you for that great comment. I am glad you found this poem effective at delivering its message.

travmaj from australia on August 04, 2014:

It's a wow from me too John. I note your comment about keeping it subtle, not an easy task with the subject matter. I thought the subtle, almost laid back treatment worked well and made it quietly powerful.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 04, 2014:

Thank you Gypsy,

I appreciate that comment. Glad you enjoyed, and thanks for sharing.

Gypsy Rose Lee from Daytona Beach, Florida on August 04, 2014:

Voted up and awesome. This was incredible. Passing this on.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 03, 2014:

Hi Flourish, thanks for reading and your kind comment. I thought it a bit risky but didn't want to go too over the top and tried to keep thing subtle so it passed Hub Pages censorship.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 03, 2014:

Loe your new profile pic.

FlourishAnyway from USA on August 03, 2014:

John, this is out of this world fabulous with its twists and turns. I love the twenty dollar wife phrase and i like your allusions -- not too over the top. This is you bat work yet and quite a risk.

Faith Reaper from southern USA on August 03, 2014:

You did capture Poe's "The Raven's" essence and cadence as that is the poem I thought of while reading here.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 03, 2014:

Glad to hear that Faith, thanks for coming back.

Faith Reaper from southern USA on August 03, 2014:

Oh, I have always loved John Waite and The Babies : )

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on August 03, 2014:

Thank you MsDora, that kind of comment means so much, especially coming from you. My poem has obviously achieved all it's goals. :)

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on August 03, 2014:

My favorite kind of sermon is the kind that makes me want to go home and read or re-read the text the preacher referenced. You managed to preach that kind of sermon without preaching a sermon. The narrative in this poem, as well as the effect of you mentioning the psalm is off the chart! Exceptional!